Okay. One thing straight - I really do like your story, and I think you have an awesome idea going. But it seems to be focused completely on dialogue - and the characters' personalities don't come through. Maybe it's just the first few chapters of the story; I don't know. It just seems... dry, for lack of a better word. The dialogue just doesn't seem to catch the quirks of characters' personalities - they don't come to life in my mind. Almost robotic. I'm really not trying to flame you, at all. Because you're talented enough to stick to a story to finish it (something I have yet to do). But I think it would be worth your time to go back and edit - give your characters a distinct personality - not just Mark and Harmony, but other ones too. Then I'm sure it'll hold my interest for a lot longer than the first 10 chapters. Keep writing though; you have a lot of talent.

-FrenzyFan78

Mel, you rock my socks. I'm so sorry I've been gone lately...you're stories are awesome and I'll totally read more. Talk to ya later!

Your Friend (FOREVA!),Alyssa

terrific story. I read it all in one setting, mind you it took me all day. I just couldn't pull myself away. You're a great writer. I hope to read more of your stuff. ciao

this should be a book

Damn... I can't believe after all they went through they didn't end up together! And they kept their promise that they would meet up after 10 years. You did a great job writing the story though! : )

Oh. My. God. This is one of the best stories I have ever read. Better than a lot of published books even. Have you ever considered getting this story published? I really think it would make it.
Well, I wish you luck, if you decide to try and publish it. I really think publishers would be fools not to publish this.
Take care.
Megan

no! i hate u i hate u i hate u! ah you suck ! they needed to be together.

pew! country? thats a sin here too... okay so i shall go read on. AHOY!
(im insane)-
kizz*

Oh my God. This.. was incredible! I loved it so much, but the ending was so sad :'( I love this story. Great job!

Wow... this is AMAZING!
i will keep this story on my favirites list forever!
The ending was sad thou.I wanted MArk and Harmony to get married! Oh well, this ending makes more sense.
I give this story... *drumroll*
15 out of 10!
*Ever~White*

OMGosh! Have I really not reviewed in this long? I'm sorry. But, OMGOSH! Your story is so good! I got all misty-eyed at the end. That's too bad Mark and Harmony didn't get together. Yet such is a melodrama, aye? Mark even has a daughter! Wow! Didn't see that one coming, or at least not with someone Italian. That's really wonderful, still! I know they're fictional characters, but I'm so in love with all of them. Especially Jack. How I'll miss him... Anyway, really terrific job yet again! I can't say it ended too quick, because this story is 87 chapters long, but... I just love it so much that I'm sorry it had to end. Some of the greatest stories are like that though, I guess. You never want to put a good book down, even once it ends, but all good things have to come to an end. Wow, I should be a motivation speaker. Okay, I'll stop rambling now. You're a fantastic fiction-author, and I hope to read more of your stories soon!
~*~Clever Fox Cub~*~

*cries* i didn't like the ending..but i did...its so sad! and i can't believe that the story is done! i've been addicted to it forever, now what am i going to read? *sighs* but anyways, i loved the story, it was great...i'm sad they didn't stay together, hahaha, but you're an incredible writer! you should write more, cuz i need something to read!

AW its so sad! yet so good! i can't believe they didn't talk for 10 years! omg this was so good! im sad now its over'( so sad *tear* they finally admit their feelings for each other and she moves 2 l.a like holys hit way 2 break some1s heart! i loved this story so much! ur an amazing writer i think you will go far doing this!

Whoa this story was so addictive! I started reading it yesterday & I finished it today.. The ending was really sad :( Did not expect that to happen... I don't think that the epilogue was necessay, though. Like, I think it would've been better without it. But either way, it was still really sad..

AH! I am EXTATIC! It turned out WAY better than I could have ever predicted. Awesome job, I just can't believed I missed it! I'm on vaca and been without the computer for almost a week. Anyway, I totally loved it - TO DEATH! This will, forever be, one of the GREATEST STORIES I HAVE EVER READ! That includes published authors. As well. Awesome job Melanie. I'll talk to you on IM
Loyal Follower of Melanie's Genius,
Alyssa Jo~*