|Reviews for My True Identity|
| brinalovesyouxx chapter 42 . 10/25/2012
Truly a touching story. It brought me weird emotions and thrill and i am so happy that i got to read this story. I love the characters, all of them, and like ive heard many people say, a good hero isnt good with a a good villain and that's what you've done. Keep up the the awesome work and i look forward to reading more of your stories :D xx
| AnonymousReads chapter 42 . 8/14/2012
Oh i did not see that one coming i dont like andrea how could she walk out on him i think you should write a sequel about allison maybe include ariel in some way i would love to read it. Good story. :)
| Sky chapter 1 . 12/6/2010
I havent even read the story yet but i just love your prologue so i cant wait to read the rest of the story. which im gonna do right now
| daniba chapter 42 . 11/29/2010
Wow. This story was amazing. Just amazing. Andrea and Josh had me captivated. I cried when they were separated and smiled when they reunited. And Wade, so sad. The ending, when Andrea revealed she was in the FBI, had me nearly to tears. I couldn't believe that she would leave Josh with their child.
This has to be my absolute favorite story on fictionpress. I hope that you continued with your writing.
| junebird28 chapter 42 . 8/1/2009
Hey! I just have to say that this story was amazing. At first, when my friend told me to read it, I was skeptical because I've never read a story on fictionpress written by a guy and from a guys point of view, but I'm glad I read it. It was so worth reading the entire thing whenever I had any free time. Honestly, it was awesome! I really enjoyed andreas character and I was so sad when wade died, but aside from that, it was amazing!
| Imagination's Dust chapter 11 . 1/13/2009
Andrea had blond hair and blue eyes for a good part of the beginning of the story. Now its chestnut hair and hazel eyes? o_O
| Imagination's Dust chapter 12 . 1/13/2009
Stopping my reading to review for a bit. Several pointers of advice.
While I do enjoy this story so far, there are things that almost made me quit reading.
- The use of names like Giovanni, Diaz, Mario, Enrico, are somewhat cliche in gang plots. It all sounds too overdone when you use names like that.
- The stuff about only one room left...come on, that's a bit too much. If you want to create a "deep" moment for your characters, you could have had them talk while driving, particularly in chapter 11. It ticked off my logic radar. You can't pull that twice in one story.
- Bank heists. They are never that simple, even in Miami. There's usually a backup plan for "big banks with big money".
- I find it odd that while Mario had a backup plan - to catch a plane to NY - Josh didn't have a clue about what to do. I thought he'd have some fallback plan.
- The busting-Enrico-from-jail bit...the police finally catches a big-shot mob member, and the so-called-intuitive detective hands over the card key to some random guys in police suits without asking for their IDs? Not so real. o_o
These are the biggies that I had issues with. So far, the story is entertaining if somewhat predictable. I like your easy wording and it flows well too, so there's a plus.
Not meaning to offend with this critique. :D
| drea chapter 42 . 7/1/2008
i didn't think i would like it but the story was so goo
| youpin chapter 42 . 2/20/2007
| dawn's unforgiving darkness chapter 5 . 11/29/2006
i love the story
but ur writing style is confusing
| anon chapter 42 . 1/15/2006
Aww.. how sweet. See this is something that can be called a good story. It was reasonably well thought out, with a couple interesting characters. Mostly, it delivered what it promised, an interesting story, with an ending that fit the overall mood of the story. A happy ending. :D
| Iekinya chapter 6 . 8/25/2005
| Slugabed chapter 1 . 8/5/2005
Sounds like it's from a girl's point of view. Either that, or he's metrosexual.
| fearlessgoddess2 chapter 1 . 5/16/2005
Hey, your story wasn't bad. I haven't written on for quite a while, but I still like to read some of the newest stories occasionally. I you have a lot of talent for writing that much. You have a lot of patience, and that's important, and I liked the intro, but I stopped at the third chapter. You should slow the story down a bit. And maybe I could help editing it. But you already have the makings of a good writer because you are persistant. I know myself that it takes a lot of time and patience to write a story and then post it chapter by chapter onto the internet. Mail me back if you get this! Maybe you can read something of mine sometime!
| R.Valaina chapter 42 . 5/4/2005
Holy crap, this is such a good story! I loved it, I read the whole thing in two days! I can't believe it's over...I love Josh and I'm relieved and happy that this story has a happy ending.
The way the characaters grew up in this story, learned from their mistakes, friendship, romance, action..sigh this story has it all.
You're a very talented writer!I love the way you write and I hope that this story will get published because it will be in my bookcase! haah, well long review. Keep up the great, amazing work.
This story was beautiful, well done!