boy does that chick need a reality check! good and pure her? yeah whatever...

*howls in pain* My mom just "treated" my wound with the same cat medicine, insisting it works the same way on humans. She better hope so. Or else I have to use Dettol detergent. This chapter was good stuff, I think I mentioned it before. In a way, it seems like Sarah has come to her senses, well at least she's headed there. I liked the whole encounter with Scott and your repetitive intro to the chapter.

I'm getting negligence from your IMs but yeah..on to the review. 7 weeks was almost..eternity. Hope you weren't annoyed by the elusive me. If that made sense. It's quite an obvious difference from how you previously wrote..like..it was more mature and whole in a certain sense. I think that camp DID assist you in some way or another. The whole monologue thing is really deep, you excel at it. You pry into your characters' minds just too well, has everyone speechlessly intent on reading it. I'm a lil crazed right now. Interesting kisses that transpired..almost instantaneously. You write well. That's without a doubt.

update soon

Sarah is a bitch and I really do hate her. See Chad, he did the wrong thing yet I still like him. I find her quite evil. And Scott, well he's just cool. He's a manipulative person, yet I like him personally. Anyways, The writing for this chapter was horrible or bad so I don't think the screenwriting experience hurt your writing very much. Blah whatever I'm rambling. If you don't make Sarah likeable soon I'll cut off your you know what ;) yes I'm resorting to death threats now. Kind of. Whatever, Sarah! Make her good again! I use to like her! Oh yes I know... make Chad realize he loves her (damn that's sappy! and you're not a happy ending person! But C'MON! You're KILLING the STORY here!). yes, Chad and Sarah get together, Sarah realizes her evil way and goes good. I seriously doubt you'll do that though.
-Ann

I LOVE this storry, sorry I haven't reviewed in a LONG time! I really like Jordan, please let her end up with him! PLEASE UPDATE SOON!
~ Amy ~
You're 16 huh, you're not old! Try being 18, I feel REALLY old!

Thats just to bad for Natalie. Ur coming to California? Interesting... U certainly got a better gift for ur birthday than i did. Shoot i got more gifts for graduation than birthday. Anyway have fun in Cali, i do.
~*kat*~

You updated too much in three weeksI need a long time to catch up so dont give me a hard time...
happy birthday. &&go work at Abercrombie, oh you with the crew cut.
Have fun in California! Maybe you can come over. &&go to six flags in Valencia, because NJ is lame, no offense.
m its been awhile. your authors notes are getting longer &longer.
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bye!

Wow this is so good. But... Why is Sarah protrayed as a slut. That kind of defeats the purpose. Hopefully you are not planning to let her go with Chad in the end. That would just screw the story up. But i must admit the story was pretty good!
~ Stevshals

bahaha I'm that way too! I mean seriously, what's the POINT with WRITING with your HANDS? *shudders* Anywho, This is getting kinda confusing. one minute she's genuinely crying, the next she's all "haha bitch GOTCHA THERE with my TEAARRSS". Is Sarah bi-polar? ... just wondering ;) Drama Drama Drama... but all in all, pretty good chapter.

wow, after reading some of the reviews... for the first time in my life. i actually feel *OLD* to the person who is saying that they are now a frosh in hs... im now officially a senior. you have no idea how strange this feels

youre 16? and youre coming out to cali to learn how to write?
huh... cool

Wow. Don't moderate your works because I personally think that you are currently writing way above what you previously used to. It was a funny-ish encounter between Nat and Sarah. Jordan's dialogue sorta came out a lil's stiff and unreal. Enjoyable read as usual..and Happy Belated! Finish this before Cali!

hey, this chapter has definitely been the best. I liked how u described everything. Happy Birthday! I'm now considered a freshman in HS. ttul

Wow she's going low. Sorry for the delay, the network in my house was down but I definitely now am on the ball. I'm leaving for californina sat so I won't be able to review till july, i think i told you. But anyway nice start. def improvement. ~Lisa~