Reviews for It Only Hurts When I'm breathing
Raynedrop1894 chapter 7 . 10/13/2008
love the story but whats going to happen between her and adnois if she never went to him to tell him that his brother was in prison?
Eve chapter 7 . 4/3/2005
*pout* Why are the chapters so short? It's so good! Where did you get the idea?
wsb chapter 1 . 2/6/2004
you are so damn stupid courtney and in case you where wondering it's me and if you don't remember wsb standsfor whory slutty biutch
Jess chapter 1 . 1/17/2004
I just wanted to say I like your title ALOT. It's awesome.
Aesper Drame chapter 7 . 1/17/2004
I think you have something going here, but I must make a few comments.
1) Your chapters are entirely sporadic, there’s no telling where they’ll start or stop. You should end a chapter when you conclude an event, not in the middle of one.
2) Your preface/prolouge/1st chapter whatever it is, is really messed up. Please place the big blob of text into paragraphs! That might end some confusion about who’s speaking and what’s going on.
3) Keep your /all/ your stuff double spaced, reading single is hard on the eyes and double makes it look cleaner.
All else is good, be careful though of grammar and sentence stucture. Keep on writing.
laprincesadelasuisa chapter 7 . 1/17/2004
it's good keep writing peace
laprincesadelasuisa chapter 5 . 1/3/2004
This is a fun story
I like it,the vampires and magic stuff.
Julie chapter 4 . 1/2/2004
i like this story, write more
Guest chapter 2 . 1/2/2004
Please use paragraphs. It is too difficult to read.
Weird girl chapter 1 . 1/1/2004
it's a great start...but now I'm left wonderin who Edan is and if Adonis is bein bad to Chaise...plzz update soon...