| Reviews for Every Night |
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   Seeker of the Way chapter 1 . 1/9/2004 i like but, but i agree that you should change it to past tense. perhaps separate into three sections, past present future? or not ... |
| Ayx chapter 1 . 1/5/2004 NO.. I think it runs well how it is well written Ayx |
| The Red Fatalities chapter 1 . 1/4/2004 *Yes*, it should be changed. Poem's still great without it, though. And you mentioned me! *swoon* All of mine's for you too, whether you have your name at the top or not. You're my muse and my savior and my reason. Oh... Oh... That is so beautiful. So incredible. Really, I don't have the words. For me this is my favourite poem, because it touches something deep down inside of me, and inside all humans I think. There's regret and everything, but there seems... I don't know, for me it seems as if the narrator still knows he/she could never have said 'I love you too' because it would have been so true it became a lie... I am so incoherant. Maybe you get what I mean. Also, the last rhyme - 'said' and 'did' - is really clever. Because it's only a half-rhyme it kinda stops the flow, and that's a perfect and almost unnerving ending for the poem, because nothing can be made right... This is probably the longest review I have ever left for anything. And this poem truly deserved it. - The Red Fatalities |
| Infinite Smiles chapter 1 . 1/3/2004 I LIKE THE POEM, BUT I THINK YOU ARE RIGHT AND IT WOULD BE MORE POWERFUL IN PAST TENSE. |