Reviews for i really am a good girl
me chapter 1 . 11/20/2013
This is a really nice and emotional peom because i see myself in it,
I really am a good girl,
I'm really sure I am,
Although daddy say's I'm always bad,
Does that really mean im damned?

I really am a good girl,
My teachers all tell me so,
I always do all my work,
Daddy say's its not good enough though,

I really am a good girl,
My mother says it's so,
I tidy up my room,
And keep my toys in rows.

I really am a good girl,
But my daddy doesn't agree,
He thinks I'm off having fun,
But that shall never be.

I really am a good girl,
My friends all tell me so,
They say I'm too much of an angel,
That I need to let it go.

I really am a good girl,
But my daddy disagrees,
He thinks I have the devil in me,
That I should prey before I leave.

I really am a good girl,
I have steaming hot baths,
It's to rid me of evil,
It's painful but I'm not bad.

I really am a good girl,
I tell nothing that goes on at home,
I leave the tears in the house,
And collect them when I'm alone.

I really am a good girl,
I swear upon my grave,
I never would hurt anyone,
But my self, that's a different way.

I really am a good girl,
I promise throughout the years,
I'll help whenever possible,
Although my daddy gives me tears.

I really am a good girl,
I try to be warm,
You see my daddy needs warmth in bed,
I do hope it's not wrong.

I really am a good girl,
But I cry because it hurts,
I think its normal I hope it is,
My daddy say's it's to learn.

I really am a good girl,
I try so very hard,
And although my daddy hates me,
At least im not so bad,

I really am a good girl,
I think the demons are all gone,
And although he always makes me cry,
He can stop the demon's going on.

I really am a good girl,
Although he says im not,
At least I'm warm and of use,
Even if it hurts a lot.
Ellie Driver chapter 1 . 2/23/2006
I like the way this started, but then it kind of went downhill from there. I absolutely LOVE the Heaven series. BY FAR the best V.C. had ever written. This was nicely written. -Ami
Story-Teller's Aide chapter 1 . 3/13/2004
that's so sad, i hope you didn't experience that. the repition is particularly effective in this piece
To-Speak chapter 1 . 1/31/2004
that so beautiful and sad... aww the poor kid...
Celest Covax chapter 1 . 1/24/2004
Now, I don't cry...but that brought me close to tears. That was poem was amazing. On to my favorite list it goes.
imxnotxyourxstar chapter 1 . 1/13/2004
That's incredibly sad, but beautifully written. I liked it a lot. Keep it up
Cally chapter 1 . 1/8/2004
There's so much depth in your poetry, you capture the emotion so well. Sound's useless but I hope this never happened to you. I really like this poem, brought me close to tears. Thanks for sharing.
KaseyLovesNoOne chapter 1 . 1/4/2004
OMG this is just like my life! This is going straight to my favorites and so are you! Thank you so much for sharing it!
*K $ey*
Kittle chapter 1 . 1/4/2004
I am definately adding this to my favorites. Wonderful writing. So sad.