Reviews for Suicide poem
Isca chapter 1 . 1/10/2009
It's short, yet vivid, and it flowed well.
Ravensbleeding chapter 1 . 11/27/2007
It flows very very smoothly, and although it's short it's deep, and that's a good thing. I like the rhyming because I know that I could never rhyme anything and still pull it off that good. Good job.
smarty chapter 1 . 1/29/2004
you idiot! what the hell were you thinking? this is an insult to anyone that has EVER had to deal with depression. it is just plain crap.
faithinfate again chapter 1 . 1/28/2004 you mind if i ask if you have had any experience with cutting? just becuase i have, and although each person is different, there are similarities, of which you portray the inverse.
AgtBauer24 chapter 1 . 1/16/2004
Woah, nice poem. Very creepy but good. I liked the rhyming.
Flotom chapter 1 . 1/9/2004
from a friend of Florence:
the end lines don't fit the rythym of the rest of the poem, perhaps getting rid of the "And" and changing "you hear" to hearing or something?
you forgot the apostrophe on "the girl's hand".
interesting poem for someone so young. well written though. vivid images of the knife.
(Florence who's behind me says chillout)
Infinity Plus One chapter 1 . 1/7/2004
I like your rhyming scheme in this poem. The last two lines create a twist at the end. Well done.