I like it. Very interesting concept. I once heard it said, does the caged bird look at the free bird with longig, because he is free, or with pity, because he is homeless? You put that into poetry very well. Your a great writter.
Valerie

I love the metaphors...*Grabs list of Things-To-Do and writes 'Work on Metaphors so might possibly be half as good as Infinite Smiles'* Hehe. Like I said, I love the metaphors. The sad thing is, that this is so true of life...(the poem, I mean.) And...*chokes* My vocabulary? Seriously? I will not honeycoat my words. Frankly, my vocabulary SUCKS. Ah well. I can wish and hope and continue to idolize you. Hey, when are we going to see one of YOUR works in print, eh?

I think I'd rather know the truth than think something that is wrong. Then at least I can be prepared for something that could actually happen.
And I don't know if the poem has been accepted - the deadline for submitting things is April 1st. I also submitted the flitsy fairys, actually. _

incredible! i love this poem!

WOW! que lindo...me gusto mucho.

I really like this one. It reflects how I feel often enough. I love the structure as well... My rhyming pieces never turn out so well.
Raye
(And the Gypsies one, I was just walking home one night and I was humming a song about a gypsy that my best friend sang that night. And I was thinking about how I heard it, but he wasnt singing it for me. That poem is one of my favorites, but of course no one would get it unless I explained, so... no, youre not dumb! :)

to me this has a beautiful airy flow (don't ask) and i luv the whole rhyming scheme! great choice of words 2!

This is pretty good. Nice image and words. Better flow than the last one. Nice philosophical moments as well!