A bit confusing and rushed at parts, but it is a good start.
-S. Lysander

Do you really think that their parents would just let them go? If everyone thinks it's a joke, why are they still going to do as it says? It makes no sense.

Interesting...I have a question of credibility, though. Don't you think that if a trio of youngish girls was called to an Army HQ with instructions to bring extra clothing, their parents would have greater objection? It's obvious they think it's a joke, so wouldn't they call and get information? Talk it over as a family? You don't really give any detail as to what reactions are when the parents find out, besides trepidation on Robyn's part; also, that isn't reflected in the pillowfight scene. On the other hand, that scene is well-described. It reminds me of my own family. Keep writing!

I'll just get the ball rolling, here. I've finished a story! I can go all the way! I'm less likely to ditch everyone early on! I CAN DO IT! Ya!