|Reviews for Line Crossing|
| reader chapter 17 . 12/25/2012
ok. slapping her and calling her all that? Uncalled for. I would not forgive someone for doing that crap.
| laughing my a. off chapter 5 . 11/15/2011
I love this story! About how often do you update?
| ghurl00 chapter 30 . 9/15/2009
justin is so ugh! weird. who wants to pretend anyway? anyhow, love andreas character, very sweet.:D
love ur story.
| I Murder on Impulse chapter 32 . 7/17/2008
| Splutter chapter 32 . 3/8/2008
good story, if not rushed and unrealistic.
| AJS chapter 32 . 2/1/2008
This is a cute story, and sometimes a little cheesey, but I feel like there is not enough development of characters and relationships. You didn't spend much time doing the transitions between love and hate. Some of the stuff didn't make sense and kind of just hung there, making it sound like you knew where you wanted to go but weren't quite sure of how to get there. Kiara should have been pissed off at Andreas for not even taking the time to listen to her explanation when she "cheated" on him, and honestly, I have a hard time believing that Andreas actually loved her if he was so quick to turn against her, call her a fucking whore and a cheating bitch, and break it off. He seemed more pissed off that he had gotten cheated on than sad that she cheated on him. Also the relationship between Matt and Kiara was very sudden too. I think you tried to drop hints but they just came out like they were friends. There wasn't much development in that relationship, or Matt's feelings for her, either. Matt also wasn't a good friend for just turning around and dating Kiara knowing the feelings between Kiara & Andreas. Also Justin. I always get a little... aldkfjaldfkj... well this is a personal preference but did you really have to make Justin so out of control? Shouldn't Kiara have chosen Andreas over even a perfectly nice, normal, sweet guy instead, simply because he wasn't Andreas? Justin's ephiphany at the end there was also very sudden. It didn't really make any sense. If it had been Kiara breaking up with him that made him realize it, then shouldn't he have realized it right after she broke up with him? How long were Kiara & Andreas engaged anyways? I think the ending would have had a slightly nicer touch if it had ended with a scene of Kiara & Andreas together, since this story WAS about them. Just one more thing was that I think you confused the image/sterotype of goth and thug... or gangster, whatever. Gangster guys are the ones who wear the baggy, sagging pants, the chains, the bling bling, whatever. Goths are the ones with all the piercings, the skinny jeans (I guess cargoes could work?), the spikes, etc. etc.
I don't know. I don't mean to bash your fic or anything, because it's cute and it's lighthearted, and jeez, fics like these are my guilty pleasure because I love fluff. But I just feel like the chemistry between Kiara & Andreas just wasn't all there. It was cute though.
| ANGEL992210 chapter 32 . 4/30/2007
| christinaxxyo chapter 32 . 4/17/2007
Aw, nice to know they get a happy ending. When Andreas left in the middle of the story I was like, "What the heck?" But I really liked how everything turned out. A bit cliche, but I love cliches. Everything's based off of them. I completely forgot who Andrew and Sarah was, if they were in the story before that is, and thought about it for at least 5 minutes before I gave up. And ways, great read and very well-written. D
| goodbyemylover chapter 32 . 8/22/2006
hey,i really loved this story...it was so cute!
| rae chapter 32 . 5/2/2006
good ending. you've tied everything together nicely.
| rae chapter 3 . 4/30/2006
i doesn't seem as if there is any real animosity here. they just act as if they are fooling around, even flirting. this isn't a flame, just an observation.
| awaitinglove chapter 14 . 4/13/2006
omg i love it!
| aim-snap-fall chapter 32 . 2/3/2006
thats was really cooL! it took me a while to read cause of school but it was just fricken awesome!
wow! thats soo cute! ahaha yeh good stuff.. i like the ending with the line crossing.. thats madd
| lei chapter 24 . 2/2/2006
aaw! shes dating sumone! what the! oh wel... i luv andreas
| aim-snap-fall chapter 7 . 1/31/2006
hey! your stories real madd so far! awesome stuff!i like how hes a punk! not much stories these days are like that! & i like that shes asian cause i am! & yeh its madd cause hes a punk-skatie!awesomeness!