Reviews for Fresh Game
Black Earrings chapter 1 . 8/22/2004
That was so...forceful. I can't pick another word to describe it, except maybe "wow". That reminded me of my Bright Eyes boy. Yay for Infinate Smiles!
Post Apocalyptic chapter 1 . 7/28/2004
Simple but nice. Makes me thnk of the EvenESense song.
Incrys chapter 1 . 3/19/2004
I continually envy your abilty with rhyme and rhythm. I love the analogy you use here, too.
Samekian chapter 1 . 2/23/2004
Good, but I think the second last line should have been shorter. Name and game are too far away for the rhyme compared to say and decay. I liked the theme though, very good.
Seeker of the Way chapter 1 . 1/20/2004
This felt like two different poems meshed together. I was going to use that as a criticism, but them I remebered that Beck did a few lyrics like that.
Nice way to work off of the beats of a theme! You are really onto something!
BecomingMyself chapter 1 . 1/18/2004
Interesting to look at infatuation as only physical attraction and explicitly as a game!
TumblingKitty chapter 1 . 1/18/2004
Wow, interesting...nice metaphore _. Lookin' forward to reading some of your other stuff to figure out your style.