Very nice, just checking out some of your work after you commented on my own...

I must say, I really like this story, although I didn't like how it was so vague about the entire backround information, I liked it in general. I especially loved how you entwined the words of the song with the story.

awe cute! I've been meaning to write some kind of vampire story... now I am inspired... but a las, I am not good at writing two stories at once... it shall have to wait hehe...

Nice thing to write about. It started out pretty good and very creative. But after he bit her, it all went down hill. Dialouge isn't very intereting when it isn't promoting anything. You could have been more descriptive, as well. However, the idea is a good one.