Reviews for A Long Time
deefective chapter 1 . 11/26/2008
Review Marathon Prize!

I like how you start each verse with "It's been a long time". The repetition here is useful and it gets the point across. But I think that you should change either the 3rd or fourth verse at these parts:

1. "Since I could hear your name"

2. "Since I could think of your name"

There, the repetition brings down the piece and it doesn't really sound nice. Also, I find it breaks the flow because it's like reading the same thing over again AFTER there's already a part that repeats.
Mime chapter 1 . 1/29/2004
I've had a hard week, and this makes me feel like crying everything out. Good job with bringing out the emotion in this piece.
William Ironclad chapter 1 . 1/24/2004
A double meaning. I must say, it sucks that you're missing too things that you seemed to have loved a lot.
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The Great, the Mighty, the Orc King