Reviews for Breathless
CaramelCream chapter 1 . 10/20/2005
short and sweet (though not a sweet message). I love how you get to the point without having to spell it out to the reader.
SeaVoi chapter 1 . 5/2/2004
Wow, who made you angry, this is a very good haiku, i like it! :)
Shades of Ink chapter 1 . 4/26/2004
You have a great way of harnessing pain in three lines.
It almost makes me pity the poem itself. It so small... but with such huge meaning. Great job.
Endless Nightmares chapter 1 . 3/25/2004
Hello-
Wonderful haiku. Nice use of your 5-7-5. Great job. This either could be really sad, or really disturbing. But a very good haiku.
Chaloux chapter 1 . 3/13/2004
I like the three/ four liners. They help you focus on the point. Going to read some more!
Infinite Smiles chapter 1 . 2/20/2004
I'm not a big fan of haikus, but this one is rather beautiful.
Morde Tempest chapter 1 . 2/9/2004
Haiku is one of my favorite forms. Keep it up!
tangible mandible chapter 1 . 2/9/2004
I've never been able to write haiku, so I think its cool when I find a good one. You've done a good job creating the emotion here. Anyways, good job, and thanks for the review!
Aslan Israel chapter 1 . 2/3/2004
Short, but flows nicely.
WhiteRequiem chapter 1 . 1/30/2004
Very well written. The way that each line flows smoothly into the other intensifies the power of this haiku.
"Drowing in your bitter words" is a very impacting line...
-Grant19-
Uranian chapter 1 . 1/29/2004
This is the definition of 'short but sweet'. Seeing it so short when I first saw it was kind of surprising, but the words...and the lines tied in so well. Great job!
Chaosrayne chapter 1 . 1/29/2004
Hey, Lsay.
Nice haiku. Nice. It's a haiku that conveys a depth of emotion beyond simple words... it's very deep and intriguing. I like it. Dark and lonely.
...why am I talking like my english teacher? Oh well.
Oh, and thanks for reviewing my 'last words' fic. In case you didn't know, there are two more chapters of that thing. It's up already.
Wingless Fairy chapter 1 . 1/29/2004
Very good. Usually haiku seems incomplete and too short, but this was perfect. Keep writng! Thanks for reviewing my poem
CrimsonSoulTears chapter 1 . 1/29/2004
Wow. A haiku I enjoyed. Never read one of those before.
(success on your part I feel).
As it is a miracle it is added tot he favourites.