The writing is rich in atmosphere, expertly blending intrigue and tension with vivid world-building. The character dynamics are compelling, and the narrative keeps you hooked with its unfolding mysteries.

Fin.

Congratulations on finishing your truly epic tale! I must admit I hoped for a sequel story featuring Ki'ol -alone with his paranoia- and his journey to either a happy life or an unhappy end. But it seems he fucked up making it a heroic adventure and we'll have to skip to the closure of the saga.

I look forward to your future writing, I expect nothing less than excellence. Thank you for sharing your talent with the world.

Jesus! What a brutal ass chapter! I totally didn't see any of that coming. I feel bad for Elohm but what a great twist. That said I'm back to reading

I like how Talin just settles everything. What he says is law and it just happens. It doesn't matter what their station, problem, or opinion is. If Talin says it than it is so and that is that

Ki'ol is no fun when he whines...he needs to man up and grow a pair. Anyway, YAY for Talin's return to sanity (however much he ever was at least) and I feel bad to say it but I was really happy to see our pain stealing, wound healing parasite make his return. Talin is way more badass possessed.

I'm sorry that I haven't been leaving more reviews but my silence has kind of been for two reasons. The first is that I am always so eager to get to the next chapter that I forget to hit the review button. The other is because I have been doing most of my reading on my iPhone and it is really hard to type a review on a phone. In fact, if some of this is misspelled it is because I am typing it on a 2 inch screen.

Happy writing though! I'm almost (kind of) caught up.

Kadoda

I like Neru more now that she can't talk...it's a little late to say that but it was just on my mind...back to reading

I'm going to leave you a short review this time. Just three words:

GET THIS PUBLISHED

Hello Fate Thirteen,

You are writing a truly epic story and I'll be awaiting new chapters for as long as it takes.

As for critisism, I think some character developments could be a bit faster as well as some plot transitions. You write fabulously, are great at creating an athmosphere and setting the mood, and your main characters have souls. So to address your weaknesses I suspect you'll need to keep an eye on them while you're not writing, but rather meta-writing: when you're thinking about what you'd want to write that day, or about the plot and how you'd want to progress it.

Because when I read your story I get totally submerged in it and get the feeling the characters are walking the path of their fate, so to speak. I get the impression that you already know the whole mainplot of your story, but just need more focus to bring it all together smoother. Keep the subplots more compact, give portions of the story real estate roughly proportional to their importance. Sometimes less is more, watch out for writing somewhat redundant content. Because once you have written it, it will be awesome and a pity to throw away. In no way am I disagreeing with the pace of your story by the way. It fits with the melancholy.

Thanks for sharing your wonderful writing with us and I wish you luck.

AMAZING! With a little bit of edit, it could be just as good as if not better than most of the published fantasy novels.

I'm curious why it is that Leila was taken by the devil king. I know that he wanted children or something of the sort, but was she special in a way?

Great war descriptions and battles. I wonder if the dragons are just going to decimate the southern armies?

I really don't like Pulan or Ki'ol all that much because Pulan really did not have to go and do it with Talin in the bath that one time and it makes me think worse of her. Ki'ol is just being wierd and all drunk. I really did like him when he was fast with his stealth and his daggers; that was cool.

Keep Updating!

That was amazing! I can not wait to read more, I forget just how much I love this story until I read the next chapter then I love it even more.

I forgot just how good this story was. I loved the last two chapters that were posted and can not wait to read more.

To use a cliche, the plot thickens...and I am hooked.

Is it just me, or is Ki'ol at the top of his game in this book. Seems like he's finally in his element, while the elves struggle. An interesting shift, but a good consistancy in your character development. *claps for you*

I know this is a dumb question, but how exactly did Talin lose the demon? I know that it came back to him when he was fighting the devil king, but then what happened to it? I was so caught up with the other action that I missed that important part.

And, this is reminding me a lot of Gladiator. Which is not a bad thing. I have much love and admiration for that movie.

I feel horrible for Talin. He's as much a character as an object, a man as a beast. He's tortured first by a demon and now by ghosts. It's so sad.

BUT GOOD!

I love it when author's make their characters suffer, as morbid and sadistic as that might sound. :D

Keep up the great work! What's THIRTEEN? btw? Just curious.

So...sorry, but more questions for you. :) How do you keep all your characters and plotlines in your head? Do you outline, map, cluster? What do you do so you don't lose track of all that you're dealing with? I mean, you've created an entirely new world; do you just make it up as you go along? Or was there a lot of back planning.

Okay, and now for a context question and away from the contextual: Why isn't Talin just ripping these people in two? I mean, he cleaved entire harpy armies! Is he just completely exhausted and haunted? I don't know...I find that bit a little confusing.

Also, from a reader's perspective, I'm finding it slightly difficult to follow the switches in povs. Perhaps, a break or something would keep me from being startled every time I start reading from someone else's pov. In the last book, you centered more on Ki'ol and Talin with touches into the other characters' minds, but this book seems far more varied. Just something to look into.

Still, the story is brilliant; I am entranced.