|Reviews for The Observer|
| Endless Nightmares chapter 1 . 2/5/2004
Short little piece you have here. I like the detail, but I think you could have spaced things out a bit. Like you could space out after each comma.
Detail was good, so thats a plus. Description was good too. Grammar was okay, but you need some work, but I think if you read up on some grammar, I think you will do great.
I mean but looking at this, its actually good, but I'd like to see some spacing, because it would make the story look better, and flow.
Good luck, and hope to read the next chapter, or story you have. Hopefully my advice helps,
Whispers In Silence
| Dark Depression chapter 1 . 2/4/2004