|Reviews for Journey out of Evil|
| Leo chapter 1 . 11/23/2004
... I know it is just a prolouge but... I need more. It is a very good setup, but,, do you know where you want to go with this? Demon, witches... all supernatural things seem to become clutter if you focus on one or two groups. If you need help, I woould be more then happy to bounce around ideas.
| powerfulevilsporkymc chapter 2 . 6/21/2004
lisa i love this story. i love it when you make original fictions. the whole half demon thing is awsome , you really have some talent when it comes to your imagination. this is better then whatever i could think of.
| Zanduar chapter 1 . 2/4/2004
While this is a good start I do see a few flaws. For one thing do not use ( ) or ... when writing a story. It is more chatspeak and does not really belong in a story. This seems to be more of an outline for what will happen, or what you would read on the back of the book to get you interested. Your ideas seem well placed but need to be expanded upon. Also you might want to cut down on your comma use.