I really liked this story, mainly because it falls off the beaten track and shows a creativeness that with practice could blossom into some beautiful writing. I can't wait to read the second chapter. Gotta learn some more about the sleeping guy.
-Becky.

Wow, Peter. Wow. I really really like this story. The characters rock, Phan especially. Anyway one thing in particular that I like about it is the fact that I can't see where it's going to end. Although that could be a bad thing as well...continue anyway!

AWESOME! Just because no one's reviewed doesn't mean this doesn't rock. *glares*
Love the concept. The style's great too... Keep writing this.
::WingedAssassin::