|Reviews for Remember another one|
| FirstBloom13 chapter 1 . 11/12/2008
sakura's RM review 1 (finally! we got the internet up.)
I really liked this poem... it didn't seem corny, which is hard to avoid in love/unlove poems, mostly because of it was very laconic, and not filled with goofy-sounding words.
what I didn't like about it was the ending... it didn't seem to tie it together really. if you had repeated the whole first line, or something like that, it might have felt more complete... I don't know.
I will try and finish the second review tonight, but I might have to do it tomorrow at lunch...
| Manuel Fajar chapter 1 . 3/12/2006
in life heart's memories all tumble down,
a raging, frothing cataract of thoughts,
once formed the core of our soul's illusion,
now stormed and battered by black knights of hate,
our sanctuary crumbles in despair,
becoming our last home and sepulchre,
for we can no more abandon its hearth,
than we would love forget our life did give.
p.s. Hope everything's ok. m
| Unchained Soul chapter 1 . 2/16/2004
I love the last 2 stanzas soo much! I have the same problem right now, why do people have to change?
| Crelian2202 chapter 1 . 2/12/2004
Nice job. There is nothing in this one that I would not consider changing, great job.