Yo, MS here. This was lovely, kinda like Tolkien-as-a-chick. I liked the bit about the starlight caught in the silver. Etelim's speech at the end was kinda jumbled, and you wrote 'they' instead of 'thy' at one point, but this is still a sweet little piece. Thanks for reviewing our story! And I can pinpoint all grammatical errors on MD since English is a second language to her. Not my fault! Me good boy. Hope you review again!

Oh my goodness This is SO pretty! You've done a fantastic job writting this - I could really picture every detail of your story. Though it seems short, it reminds me of a fairy tale of some kind. Fantastic, a definate favorite!