This story was nothing short of amazing. It was well thought out. It had just enough drama and action in it to make it interesting. :) I'd love to know what happens to Fenix and Aiur next, but that's up to you.

-Keep dreaming-

~If Only I Knew

Nice story. I have to say though that Aiur was so frustrating. Felt like punching her more than once.

Anyways, good job!

Jaliy!~

Reading some chapters (especially those pertaining to flashbacks/ reflections) was quite a chore, because they tended to meander on senselessly.

That, coupled with the excessively flowery and descriptive language at times, made some segments of the story quite yawn-inducing.

However, your skilful command of the language is indeed admirable, especially when they aptly bring out the emotions of the characters (eg when Aiur heard of Fenix's apparent death)

Also, the final chapter seemed to be hastily done, which was quite a pity. Additionally, a short chapter on the post-war/rebel/marriage would have made the story more well-rounded.

Overall, quite a commendable effort though.

I would have given this at worst 7/10 and at best 8/10

Just my 2c worth

ah hell. Love. Sigh. I loved it.

I absolutely love this story!

x

Ali

happy ending...

thank you, i really need that (bit depressy for a couple of days now)... haha

i dont know if you're still active or not but i would like you to know that you're a great writer...

xoxo

Ekk.

Finally! Yes.

Stupid traiter perv is finally dead.

And they are finally together.

Love it.

Haydens a good friend.

Ah. Gah. Freak. Blehh.

Aw

I love the flashback.

aww...good and bad situation.

he's going back, but not as himself.

but good chapter.

stupid, stupid fenix.

how could he!

bleh. good writing.

i hate him.

i hate him.

i hate him.

malloy i mean.

good chapter.

but i hate him.

this can't be good.

good chapter.

poor little girl.

and fenix.

O.O

i swear this chapter made me misty-eyed.

but i really like your writing.

i still hate mallor. hate. hate. hate.