|Reviews for Protector II|
| DragonFaeLynn chapter 7 . 6/15/2005
There he is again. He is always in the damned way. SHe needs to think for herself and maybe she'd do the actual "RIGHT" thing. Malloy needs to be killed. Even better, Fenix should kill him! Nah, Aiur should kill him! That'd be so much better! Oh the intrigue! Anywayz, I hate that guy, but who couldn't? Shutting up now. On to your next chapter...
| DragonFaeLynn chapter 4 . 6/15/2005
Ok...um...I don't have any suggestions what-so-ever. I really like this sequel so far. I feel like I'm in the story with the characters and that I can feel their pain. The story, both stories actually, draw me in and create a new image that I've never seen before. This is the most unique story I think I've ever read on this site. Good job! Now, I will read on so that I can be caught up with everyone else. Tata~DFL
| Catharsis1410 chapter 20 . 6/15/2005
Please let everything turn out alright in the end... as in Aiur Fenix... sighs... I can't help but be hooked to the whole story. :)
| confused chapter 20 . 6/14/2005
| Rose Richonne chapter 20 . 6/14/2005
So tragic, yet so sweet at the same time. The twists are so well written, as in they give away enough but not too much. The only thing I think could use some clarity is all the war. I get so confused reading it, I don't know who's on whose side and what forces are joining. I get the bad and good guys all mixed up. But! I say I should just re-read a few chapters to refresh myself on what is going on. :) lol This was another great chapter and I liked Aiur's reaction. I'm glad you didn't do it in her point of view either, it gives it a different touch than how the rest of the story has been when you jump ahead and just get the after effects. I think this is long enough now, haha. I hope you have a good trip!
| em3e chapter 20 . 6/13/2005
Yay!An update!:DAre you french?
| LeenaAmara chapter 20 . 6/13/2005
AWSOME! I could really get how Aiur felt and the symolism of the flower was great! I'm going to die over the summer with out your writing! Its the best I've seen! But I'll just have to manage. You have great talent so don't stop writing after this trip because it would be a shame to readers everywhere.
| writtenreality chapter 20 . 6/13/2005
ok i'm going to make this quick cause i'm not supposed to be here but great chapter.. poor aiur, she must be so confuzzled and I hope Fenix will go back to her although that'd be just way too good to be possible.. ayhoo update again asap!
| michelle chapter 20 . 6/13/2005
firstly, no need to thank me. im only tellin u what u should kno and whats the truth : D also, read ur progress report and all.. and hopefully you won't come back from ur program all french-y and unintentionally switch to typing in french while doing the next chapters. haha. alrite a bit extreme.. but i don't think u have anything to worry about regarding whether people will wait or not.. cos im pretty sure we all will, with a story like this. dont blush! :D hahaha.. yeah we'll all stil be here eagerly waitnig the nex chap when u get back from ur bursary program.. so don't u dare stop writing or go rewrite everything :P
ok.. that sounded a bit demanding. just a bit. haha.. well onto this chapter. intense. hmm. i feel for fenix.. having to leave again, life giving him no choice. how he couldn't even explain to her what was going on.. yes im dreaming that it did happen he told her.. and that she won't be so cynical right now. i think aiur's being unfair to fenix..whoops donnian? yep.. i mean she loves him for god's sake! how can she just believe that he killed her father? and to believe malloy of all people? son of a bitch! argh. roanne again. god they should just both DIE.
calming down. sucks how she's hurt by the same guy again but i just cant see how aiur can doubt fennian [yeah.. u got it right.. thats fennix and donnian put together :D:D]. angela wasn't as understanding as i would expect, but i guess from all the stuff that she's had to put up with - aiur's constant denial of loving fennian - and everything, its gotten to her how aiur's so cynical.. always opting to believe the worst so she would not have to wonder what really happened. the burden and stress of trying to get thru to someone so stubborn must be hard.
malloy's so. so. so. stupid. he actually thinks they'll stay loyal to him? god he sucks. and aiur hopefully won't just marry him. cos damn, its such a big deal. i hate it when she gets all weak.. and having no hope anymore, although i guess thats acceptable after losing all the people she loves. but still.. she can't practically just throw her life away, cos if she marries that ass she definitely is. she can't give in!
...look at me babbling. haha sorry. can't help it. can't think of anything more to say right now.. might review again if i do.
and once again, don't worry bout people forgettin this! not that easy! :P
| Death Princess chapter 20 . 6/13/2005
ok im feelin lazy so thisll probabli be short. uh lack of sleep thts my excuse. anyways im finalli 16 yay 4 me(not). roanne's a bitch i swear she has issues. and aiur crushing the flower truthfulli found tht quite funny god its hilarious how she twists evrything god the girl is 2 cynical. omg i just came 2 a revelation aiurs more cynical than fenix. fenix now him he gets on with it while wallowing whereas aiur just wallows then again fenix has a lot 2 do while auir dosent. im confused tho wat are fenix's aims or goals or wateva. i mean with the whole rebel thing and everything wat is he planning 2 achieve? and wat does he envision if hopefully for him he wins? or maybe he hasnt thought tht far. anywayz UPDATE AS SOON AS YOU CAN! heh french im takin tht next yr god knows why *shrugs*
| Azn-ArchAngel chapter 20 . 6/13/2005
have a nice trip and i hope u make up for all the time u miss xD
| puuuurfect angel chapter 20 . 6/13/2005
I hope you appreciate just how much I'm getting my ass on the move to leave this review before the next chapter! I'm being considerate... for once, lol. Usually, it takes me FOREVER to get around to reviewing, but I've put myself on fast forward for you, and taken time out of my revision for my Bac for you!
To the chapter, Malloy's a (censored) and I really don't like him. He's also an idiot, as if the rebels will stay on his side once they're in the castle! Fenix is also a poo, but at least he's suffering for it. Are you planning on Aiur finding out that Donnian and Fenix are one and the same before the last chapter or not? As for Aiur, don't get me started on her! She's hurting yes, but generally when you "love" someone, you don't believe that they killed your father when the person telling you that is the (censored) you're set to marry. If she marries him, I will not be impressed!
And the French course thing... my advice, don't write in French. It's no fun translating it all afterwards. I know, I've done it many a time before. In class, I tend to write in French because that way it keeps my head working in French and not flicking between English and French (that's tiring, makes me need a lot more sleep) and later translating it is just time consuming. If you're going to write in French, I'd write something else entirely.
And now I'm back off to my revision. Don't be too evil with your characters, they're only human after all, and can only take so much abuse.
| anatidaephobiac chapter 20 . 6/12/2005
your poor characters... sheesh. she better not marry malloy. tsk. tsk. that french thing sounds... interesting. i think it would probably be cool for the first few days/week, but then i'd be like. AH just let me speak english. well i hope you get the next chapter out soon.
| CrystalDusk chapter 20 . 6/12/2005
tut. ALL his fault.. well ok some other peoples fault too. but mostly his fault.
| not your average chapter 1 . 6/12/2005
this is interesting, and i will read the rest when i have time, tho i do feel that reading protector first probs wud b a good thing to do. but i have a question to ask...how do u have so many reviewers? i put my first fiction on here last night and before i cud even get any reviews it had moved to the second page where far fewer people would see it. sniffle...NYA