Reviews for The Sight of the Blind
Werecat99 chapter 2 . 4/19/2004
For some reason, I liked the idea of childbirth at a beach... although it might not be very practical.
However, I liked the child's name. Very poetic in a subtle way.
I was surprised that Evrena was able to sneak on the blind boy, since blind people have extremely acute hearing. But in anycase, this was a well written story.
Good work.
Sarah Snickerdoodle chapter 8 . 3/16/2004
great story; it's very interesting. I can't wait to see what happens next. update soon!
Freckles Victorious chapter 6 . 3/10/2004
Goodifuls. Anyway, are Canolmed and Evrena commoner peoples? If they are, then don't make them talk like all old and wise and high (as in on the social scale)and stuff. Like, make them say "Yeah" as opposed to "Yes" or stuff. If u want.
Werecat99 chapter 1 . 3/4/2004
I liked that. Your use of language is excellent and you have painted a very vivid image of the library, Dorlin and this world. I could almost see them.
The part with the prophecy was interesting, but this has been used too often in fantasy (I'm guilty of this as well). I hope that this plays out well.
Loved it so far,
Werecat
Freckles Victorious chapter 5 . 3/3/2004
la di da di da... still brilliant, i guess. but stop repeating yourself!
Freckles Victorious chapter 4 . 2/23/2004
Woohoo, good. But it seems a bit strange that wats her name, Everena, would tell Calomed and family all that stuff. And YOU NEED COMMAS, YOU REALLY DO!
Freckles Victorious chapter 3 . 2/23/2004
Yay! Brilliant! No odd sentences or anything. Go you!
Freckles Victorious chapter 2 . 2/20/2004
The part bout him being blind when he is born is kinda odd... and also the "He hung his head sadly" is odd. you'd think he'd be used to being blind. or if u really want to keep it, then make it all one sentence like "'la di da watever he says,' he said, hanging his head sadly.
But the story is quite good, despite my constructive mood.
Freckles Victorious chapter 1 . 2/20/2004
La di da... good. v. good. but anyway, when u say "...the keepers of the Library, though some were more sociable. Dorlín was not one of the sociable ones," i wouldn't have repeated the word sociable. say something like "one of them" or something creative. anyway.
Ainariel-Helyanwe chapter 4 . 2/18/2004
It is so good! i luv it this story is so going on my favorties list! oh and um what does ""Enstíeth anacuva silúnhiuth túmelenín"" mean?
Puff2978 chapter 1 . 2/15/2004
wow. this is truely going to be a classic. i can't believe no one has reviewed yet. anyways, without a doubt, you've done an excellent job on this. you clearly described every detail and it seemed like i'm actually standing right there, witnissing him reading the book. also, i can tell that you've planned everything and all set. remarkable job. continue if you can! _ please read one of my stories if you have time, thanks. :)