Reviews for Two Sides of a Sidewalk
The Postscript chapter 1 . 3/10/2007
Interesting concept. The use of many various elements was good. Perhaps a complete lack of punctuation could be played with, yet . . . add some but minimize it so that it works with your piece. Punctuation is like directions on how to read a piece. Without, interpretations might get mixed and confused. Maybe not on this piece, but on others to come, such confusion might be harmful. Do keep that in mind. A thousand different shades on how to read the same poem. Keep writing, k.
Cry Tears of Darkness chapter 1 . 5/18/2004
i like the title. can make a really cool and freaky story *ideas*
catseyeview chapter 1 . 5/5/2004
I'm adding this to my favorite stories list.
pennydeath chapter 1 . 2/22/2004
You've got a really good concept. However, I believe that you've been eaten alive by the punctuation beast...I personally think this would flow even better than it does if you just kind of...let the words be, instead of covering them with little dots and commas and such. The first three lines ("It is in the city,/I am there,/I am there.") put me in mind of a song...Again, I really like the concept of this. Keep writing!
unjaundiced chapter 1 . 2/22/2004
ooh, nice one.
Juliet Squared chapter 1 . 2/21/2004
Nice work, the meaning is quite obvious.