|Reviews for Convincing|
| pointythings chapter 1 . 6/23/2005
I like some of the wording in this, but I think your word choice is weak in places. I wouldn't use 'some kind of;' it weakens the phrase. Also, instead of using 'individual,' I would turn that into a metaphor. 'Individual' sounds like you just couldn't think of a better word. I don't like the ending either; you take a lovely poem and end it with a clunk. And there are also a couple of spelling lovely as always!Yours in writing,~pointythings~
| D chapter 1 . 6/7/2005
Your words will be immortal.D.
| concentric circles chapter 1 . 2/18/2004
i like the flow and line structure of this poem alot. it's quite relatable.