Interesting how the plot is developing. BTW I've done that Beta reading and I have torn out clumps of my hair. Lol. I'll return them to you Sunday. ).

well this story is pretty terribly written...but its got a cool plot i suppose...you might want to get an editor or something...b/c you misspell words frequently

I think Theo should have beat Aubrey into a bloody pulp.
I’m not happy with you, at the start Aubrey was a nice young man but now! Why oh why did he be so evil. Oh well
So that was Vita’s real mother?
I don’t like her
I think Vita should go homicidal and kill everyone, starting with the castle and leave their corpses to rot or kill those two that she was trying to find and then her mother… or not.
I am a little blood thirsty today aren’t I?
I can’t wait to see Theo reaction!
Very good! Loving the story!

NO!
Why must he be evil, he seemed so nice.
Oh well.
Fix the last chapter so I can understand what happened. Aubrey why, why? Where is Theo! Where is he when Vita needs him?
By the by the story is really interesting now!

Ah! this is a repeat chapter, just so you know.

ok

NO! He has gone evil!
Oh what happened to that loveable boy who was Vita's friend?
However it does add a nice twist to the story.
Poor Vita. She seems to get the short end of the stick quite a bit.
Stupid Theo he should have charged in there and slaughtered everyone, or maybe I an\m a bit too morbid. Oh well next chapter time.

OK WOW!
Big shock, they are BOTH elves!
I like elves, lightly toasted with a side of chips.
Theo is so lazy. He makes me laugh.
I was rather confused with the ageing thing.
So Theo was going to ask her to marry him, that is so sweet.
But then there is Aubrey.
Oh who is a reader supposed to go for?

OH the story is getting REALLY REALLY REALLY good!
I would have liked to see Theo kick that idiot's ass all around the town. KILL HIM!
Anyway poor, poor little Vita. I would have like to see her kill the bastard.
WOW I'll read the rest latter it is 12:57 and I need to get up early tomorrow... today. Oh well, love the story!

WOW! Was Theo forward of what. And Vita's reaction, oh the joy of saying what you think! Go YOU!
Oh POOR VITA, So she really has a tough past. She seems to be dealing with it well. I am starting to love Theo again. There is something about him that is so, clueless? Sweet? Innocent? No I wouldn't say that, hm well I don't know what it is but it is cute.
I’ll email you after the next chapter, and then I must sleep so tired. Read more tomorrow, YAY future, I will just into tomorrow’s time frame and read your story.

They kissed and made up, there could have been a wonderful and gruesome fight, but this works too.
SO they are off to find those people. Will they turn out to be enemies of allies that have to fight side by side to conquer an evil threat? Why and I typing all this when I could be reading?

I LOVE SOPHIE!
And the thing with her mum, classic!
I loved this chapter. Her mum fainted!
I wish she could have spent more time with them. So Theo is hunting her, well hunting in the nicest way possible.
I hope he doesn't do anything drastic to anger Vita, wait, no, I hope he does. Fight! Fight! Fight! Fight!
I swear I'm not a blood thirsty person.
KILL! Go bad people I haven’t met yet.

How can you do this to me I just found that Theo was mean and such and now you make me feel sorry for him, damn you and your good writing. Poor Vita, she must be going through hell, five years, she wouldn’t be powerful for her age any more.
He is running after her! So sweet. So the Bad people are going to be here soon. YAY. I love Bad people. They are just so much more... evil.
I'll e-mail you after the next chapter. Really I will... Or the chapter after that.

YEAH Go Aubrey, revenge of the cool one. No I think Theo is cool too it is just that, I don't know, he is mean that'll do.
Hm when I can't think of a cool interesting name I go to this baby name site, wait, wait don't say anything yet they do have some really cool names with cool meanings.
You could use a name like Adish which means Fire and is Persian and you can put a hiss at the end on the name, I like hissing my SHs and Ss Adishshshshshsh has a cool ring to it if you ask me but have a look. And if you don’t like that name I don’t blame you I have strange taste in names and words.
Ok, I have to go read more then I'll e-mail you then I shall sleep. Evil, evil sleep.

Aubrey, Aubrey, oh poor, poor Aubrey.
STUPID VITA. Although I don't this I could really blame her Theo is one of the coolest characters.
YAY Theo is cool and all grown up.
So what is the deal with their transformations? Who are the people changing them? MORE, MORE, MORE!