whoo. i think i need to give my eyes a break after this review. i finished reading this story, well up to chapter 22 anyways, in three days and are my eyes tired. but damn girl! this is one helluva story. it's amazing with all ur descriptions! and it's hilarious as well! that, in my opinion, is a great combo for a successful story and u have got it.
just one problem though. verb tenses. i hate them like hell but they annoy me to no end if they aren't correct. i don't mean in dialogue. just in the description/narrative parts. i can't exactly tell u the exact chapter or place where it was since this is one long story and it doesnt help much but im just saying for further reference to it. verb tenses suck ass but they really do make the story 's a suggestion u might want to take into consideration.
anyways, i bet u don't need any more praise on how well u write since so many people should have already told u, but one more wont hurt to boost the ego. u've got a catchy plot line with all the suspense in the past lives of all ur characters. it's amazing how u can keep track of it all without forgetting something. u absolutely ROCK and KICK ASS at all the emotion u present through ur characters.
u've got it going well here! hope to see u do well in ur other chapters if not better. please update ssooN!

Howdy! I SURVIVED BAND CAMP!
Yesterday was my last day and I'm SO happy! We sucked on our performance for the parents but that's ok, CUZ IT'S FINALLY OVER! My feet were SO sore when I came home.
Imagine balancing somebody very fat on your feet for about a day or so, and then imagine how your feet would feel. That's how my feet felt yesterday. And my throat was really scratchy and hoarse and dry from yelling 'LEFT' over and over. *sigh* The hardships of being a flutist.
LOL! _ I know that one line from American Pie! "And then, one time at Band Camp..." LOL! :) I love how the band geek got married to a decent person...ok...semi-decent...ok...maybe not so decent...ah well, better than Stifflier!
LOL! YAY! I got some sympathy. Ah well, not to get a sob party going on, well, band camp is pretty fun. You get to meet lots of new people and you get to meet the hottest guys. LOL! Yea! Of course singing on the radio counts as being musical! (At least it is in my books. I mean, hell, I sing along to the radio...despite the fact that I look totally retarded while doing it because I do the whole pretend-i-have-a-mircrophone-thing when what I'm really waving around in my hand is a pen, but that's ok! Cuz the people I pass by in the car do not know me and will never see me EVER again!) And besides, I suck at singing. Trust me, William Hung sounds good compared to me.
Well, the reason why I don't alter the clothes someone gives me, unless they're officially mine, is cuz I'm just too lazy to go through all that work. _ I'm sorry to say, but I'm a very lazy person.
LOL! About your friend Juanita, she sounds just like me. I did that same thing only to a jacket that my friend Julie lent me at band camp. It was drizzling (yes and we were still marching out on the MUDDY FIELD Mr. Dubby 'I'm too blind and brave and manly to notice that it's raining and that my band students are going to all die of pneumonia.) and well, I was SUPER cold. And I left my jacket in the band room, which is about a half mile away fromt he field thinking, being the smart person that I am, "Hm, the day before, it was really hot. It's probably gonna be today." Guess what?
It wasn't. Then, I left with Julie's jacket...and well, oops. I had to go back to the band room, after driving about five minutes away, which wasn't so fun considering that my Mom was not too happy when I told her that I wanted her to drive me back to the band camp.
LOL! :) Ah, yes, it would be better to keep the little staying over night thing that Jessica and Michael did secret...who knows what Miranda might come with? She might think the worse, and think that Jessica somehow seduced Michael or something. Definitely not such a good thing!
Oh, and from this chapter, I can see how Ronnie likes Miranda. Maybe he can somehow win her back by using his charm? Hm, maybe there can be a long plan formulated that involves getting those two together. *rubs hands together and grins maniacally*
OMG! You don't like Bonnevilles? :( Ah well, people like different things. If it weren't so, well, this world would be very boring. :)
Or so I think. LOL! A cherry red jeep wouldn't be so bad either...heh heh heh! Just kidding! You get the jeep and truck and I will get my car. (I really don't know what category it falls under...hm...maybe small land vehicle?)
Wow, this was one long chapter. Very nice. And I love how it gives us readers more insight into Miranda's life and why she might be such a bitch to Jessican. And I especially like how it explains why Miranda especially wants to cling to Michael...it's cuz he's a good thing in her life, and well, she's clung to every single good thing because she hasn't had a lot of good things happen to her.
I especially like how you didn't make Jessica do anything with Michael. _ It's very good! And well, it gives your story a special touch. AND YAY! Michael and Jessica are now officially going out! YAY!
I can't wait for the next chapter! Hope you update soon!
*Orient Fox*

lots more problems and lots more story to wright!

Okay, I'll bite...now i'm curious

Heheh, yes, all couples are sappy from time to time. Sappiness is, unfortunately, necessary... Ah well. You didn't go overboard with it, which is good. There are some who, like me, would make it so sappy that you could cut the sappiness with a dull spoon... Horrible.
Anyways, I like this chapter. Yay! Jessica has the makings for a choreographer! Will she start helping Michael coreograph stuff?
Ah, so there is a reason (other than being jealous) that Miranda has been giving Jessica such a hard time. I like this little peak into her past... Can't wait to see Miranda and Jessica talk and realize that they can be friends... Yah... that'll be good.
Anyways, you did a good job on this chapter, and I can't wait to read more. Keep up the good work!
~icthus

aw! lol

Great chapter! I really like this, so please update soon!
~ Aria

Wow... quite a lot happened in that chapter. Quite a lot.
Autumn Harrychin... *shudders* Scary thought. ;)
Okay... I like Autumn, but I doubt I would name my kid Autumn...
And I call it Fall too sometimes, but Autumn sounds prettier :D
I don't like the summer much either. Hot weather is no fun. But thats why I like Autumn... because it's not too hot, but its not freezing cold like winter yet.
Anyway, that was an awesome chap. And nice and long... They're officially together... yay! And the Miranda part... wow. Intense. She hasn't had an easy life. She still shouldn't have treated Jess so bad though... But I can sort of see her point now.
So... April's here. What's she planning? I'm scared.
Harrychin... that's pretty funny.
Update soon!

i LOVE this story... its so good and you always manage to add twists in each chapter so it never gets boring... hope you update soon - April should die... :)

I love the story. I spent all say reading, much to my mother's displeasure, but i couldn't stop! it had the right mix of excitement, romance, drama, everything! I like Jessica's character, how you set her up. she is loving and caring, but can still party. I also like how she finally stood up to her mother, i know we all need to have that kind of courage sometimes. anywho, congratulations on the story, and i'll be glad to have read it, and look forward to more! ~*Kimberly*~

Aw, good, the healing process has begun. It's about time, hehe. I wish one of my stories (maybe I'll post that one on this site sometime, I dunno...) would end up with a healed relationship between the gal and her parents. Unfortunately, I fear that that will not be, because it isn't exactly realistic for the story. Poor girl.
M... there were a few grammatical errors throughout the chapter, but nothing too major, so I easily skipped over them. )
Yah, it was a somewhat sappy ending, but you have to add some of those to a story like this one. In that light, I forgive you for the audacious act of writing a sappy ending. P
~icthus

This chapter was really nice. It was sweet and healing and just wonderful for everyone overall. Yes, I finally got through the story D and now I have you on Author Alert. I’m just wondering about Donna. I know you didn’t describe her, and that’s why I think that she has something else to do with the story. Perhaps she looks like Jessica? Or maybe it has something to do with April. Or even Miranda, maybe. Whatever it is, I’m sure we’ll find out soon. Update!
~ Aria

that's so sweet! *sniff*
so... when are they gonna get married?

that's so sweet! *sniff*
so... when are they gonna get married?

Yay! I'm so glad she's starting to work it out with her parents. And I'm glad Michael may just stop wallowing in his self-pity and regret. Lol...yeah you're right the feminine wiles wasn't completely random. It still cracks me up. That's a cool phrase..."feminine wiles"...lol. There's Totally Spies that's kinda peusdo-anime on Cartoon Network and Kim Possible on Disney Channel. There's probably more but those are the only two I can think of right now. lol I still love cartoons too esp old ones like looney tunes & tom and jerry. My sister's into anime so I see some of that too.