Great chapter! A long one too (more to enjoy). I can't wait for more!

I love your story so far. It's really cool and I love the plot. I can't wait for more to come. Your really a talented writer.

Still an absolutely amazing story! I think it gets better with each chapter... Lol. I can't believe I haven't reviewed you in like AGES! I'm so sorry I thought I had. But i have no criticism of anything! Truly! I'm really crap at long reviews unlike yourself but when I have more time I'll come back and leave you one that hopefully clogs your review page! Hehe. Keep it up!
Anna H x
PS. Going off the topic... who d oyu think Nathan's fourth lover is? I'm so dying to know whether you've picked up on it...

“Jessica just hoped none of the dancers didn't think ill of her for disappearing…” I like the phrase, but I don’t think it flows with the way the rest has been written. I dunno, maybe I’m just insane…
~icthus

“"Drew their offense sucks," Jessica said as Larry and Jamal groaned.” Who is the team they’re discussing? It’s the same thing as the whole digital clock thing in a previous chapter. Maybe it’s just me, but I’m curious.
~icthus

As expected as it was, this rivalry between Miranda and Jessica amuses me. I don't know why, but it does.
At any rate, I am really enjoying the story. Thanks for writing it!
~icthus

Only one comment from me on this chapter.
“"Jeez it's this late!" Jessica shot up when she noticed her digital clock flashing on her VCR.” What time did the digital clock display? Perhaps it’s just me, but I’m curious about that.
~icthus

I like this chapter, as well. Perhaps it's because I see some resemblances between Jessica's family and my mom's family... At any rate, I don't have anything to make suggestions on in this chapter.
Good job.
~icthus

'Ello, me again! Got a few points on this chapter, too...
“Jessica smiled. Whenver she talked to Larry all she could ever think about was red dyed hair and too much caffiene. Because in a nutshell- that was Larry Fraiser. ” I love this sentence. It just rocks. )
“"Why are you shaking your head?" Michael asked, growing even more surprised with her behavior. This was the first time someone hadn't believed he wasn't who he said he was. Actually this was the first time someone…” This paragraph annoys me because, in my opinion, you used Michael’s name far too many times when you could have used the pronoun ‘he’.
You're doing a great job. I hope the good work continues throughout the rest of the book. )
~icthus

It's good so far. A few pointers though, just from things I observed while I was reading...
“Though Drew had a death wish, he was one of the sweetest guys Jessica had ever met and they were still friends till this day.” The ‘till’ there makes it sound like their friendship is no longer intact on this day. What about ‘to’?
‘she said’, ‘Jessica said’, ‘Elias said’, ‘he said’… what about ‘he exclaimed’, ‘she groaned’, ‘Elias protested’, ‘Jessica argued’? Reading nothing but said gets old and boring, at least for me. Just a point. “"What are those? Four inches?dang girl are you trying to kill yourself?" Elias joked.” I like that one that you did, with something other than said (and joked, no less; I haven't seen that one for a while). )
Also, I like how you started calling the guy hazel eyes. I don't know why, but that just amuses me.
Keep up the good work!
~icthus

Lol! Yea….don’t ask about my best friend’s freaky she's not as Mirandish as she may seem in my description. Let's take for example if you were to like a person that she liked...well she wouldn't ignore you and act bitchy. It'd sort of be fun cause then the two who like the guy sort of do a type of contest thing where they keep track of points and what the guy has done to show his liking of a particular girl. It's really weird...and usually, I’m the more crazy one out of our bunch…but apparently not in the department that involves guys. I sincerely believe that a person should have more dignity and not have to throw herself at a guy and depend on him. *sighs* Ah well…but that’s just my weird way of thinking. LOL! Yea, I think there are definite signs of Miranda like tendencies here. It’s a very scary thought….
Really? I wish I could do that! I seem to always meet the guy that I’m crushing on somehow, somewhere. It’s a really weird thing. I swear, the heavens hate me! *throws hands up to the sky and wails* Wow, you are so lucky to be able to have a brother with hot friends. I don’t even have a brother. Anyhows, lol! You couldn’t go to that McDonalds? _ I’ve done that before. Like on a field trip to Traverse City, my crush was sitting in the back right by the bathroom.
Problem was, I really needed to use the bathroom.
And I didn’t want to walk past my hot crush.
So I had to HOLD MY PEE IN FOR AN HOUR!
It was definitely not fun….not fun at all…*shudders at the memories, jk!*
Anyhows, so I can understand your problems. Poor you. I seriously can understand where you’re coming from though. Lol! And Jessica? I understand now that she’s a flirt, and that the poor soul has to now act sort of like a psychiatrist to help Michael. I really feel bad for Michael…BUT STOP WALLOWING IN YOUR DEPRESSION HOLE! He won't forgive himself and MOVE ON! I really wish that I could go up to the non-existent Michael and give him a good kick in the shins...
Then again...maybe that wouldn't be such a good idea.

LOL! And as to what you said about fighting for your guy...sometimes a girl's gotta do what a girl's gotta do which may include having to fight for what she wants...as long as the guy's available and single then it's right. Like the one time in December. I was on winter break and I was talking (okay sort of flirting...okay i was really flirting...but not the all out slut way to make things clear) when a girl came our way and the guy's like 'hey carol, you're back?' And then she's like, 'oh and did you know that we're boyfriend and girlfriend'

You should have seen how fast I was when I was scuttling away. I'm sure it broke records. LOL! _
Wow, you're super organized. My stories right now are so unorganized it's not even funny! I'm currently forced to go through each chapter of my stories to write down key points made in them and key character characteristics (Did that make sense?). And well...it's a pain in the arse. And I don't think I'm gonna get it finished by the end of summer. CONFOUND IT ALL! (lol! Ignore my weirdness...although I am hyper which probably explains it cuz I just went to Mackinac Island and I was eating fudge...lots of fudge...)

Your brother actually gave his phone number to a bunch of scary stalker girls? COULDN'T HE SEE THE MADNESS AND DIABOLICAL LOOKS IN THEIR EYES? That's freakish though...having people calling your house just for your brother. Did people ever befriend you just so that they could hang out at your house and meet your brother or anything weird like that? Anyhows, enough said...

And Ms. Rowland...couldn't you like start a 'Let's Ban Ms. Rowland From Teaching' club or something? That would be pretty funny..._ And you guys would have plenty of reasons why Ms. Rowland would have to go...the school board members must be blind to not notice how:
A) The woman is practically blind herself
B)She's delusional
C) She sends students out too early and nearly gets them killed
And those are just a few of the reasons. Poor future students...they're gonna have to suffer through the blue-haired old ladies speeches. I'm kind of worrying about the cars too...

Ah yes, and on a parting note, I think I'll just whack Miranda with the drill and then I'll do her makeup so that she looks so ugly. (ie. putting too much eyeshadow, lip gloss, blush, etc. And also making her hair look horendous after I give it a lovely little haircut...*laughs diabolically*...) And I never thought about the eyelash curler and how she'd be able to use that to only beautify herself for poor unfortunate Michael...damn. Another good torture device gone to waste. lol! _

Anyhows, UPDATE! I really like this story! Especially this whole chapter with the prank and everything. It's excellent! Maybe you should make one of the pranksters (COUGH MIRANDA COUGH) get poison ivy or something.
Hm...and I wonder why Michael didn't want to participate. Was he protecting Jessica? Or was he just not participating because he thought it was too immature? I can't decide. _
And then you're gonna be doing another chapter with WATER BALLOONS AND SUPER SOAKERS! YAY! It's so much fun to use those in an all out water war. Have you ever done that? Where you have a water war where you can use water balloons, super soakers, and other miscellaneous water utensils, like a hose. Then you use those items without any mercy upon other players. LOL! It's super fun!
Especially when you play in the woods and with a ton of people. Anyhows, enough blabbing. *glances pu to see a super long review*

My long reviews haven't started annoying you yet have they? Sorry that they're so long...I just like writing a lot. lol! _ Anyhows, UPDATE!
*Orient Fox*

I LOVED this chapter it has to beone of my favs I ever read!

Oh No! I should have known that Michael would be an ass about the kiss. Guys are just stubborn, you have painted that very well in your character of Michael (as well as Miranda, but that's besid ethe point!). But speaking of Miranda, is she having a little change of heart coming soon? Your story is my new guilty pleasure, and I love to see the updates!

loved it :) the water fight/prank thing was HILARIOUS! :) i hope michael doesn't push jessica away forever.

Don't we all wi8she we could punk like him? lol. Nice chapter tho, update soon