omg

this story was absolutely amazing.

im sad that you dont have anymore stories :(

Haha...I have read this story 13 times!

That's how you know i love it

I really do enjoy this story, but I definitely think you say "Jessica" way too many times. You could try using pronouns just to make the reading flow a little better? Only a suggestion

Wow, I loved this story.

The plot was definitely good. I think this was the first dancing story I read!

Haha, I love dancing. I wish I were as good as Jessica!

But I found your story on SKOW.

You should definitely write more. I'm looking forward to reading more of your stories.

so normally I wouldn't do this, but another author guilted me into leaving a note about why I stopped reading her story.

Basically I began reading this chapter but became irritated with the fact that you're telling us everything instead of crafting it in such a way that the story shows us. Does that make sense? So you spend several paragraphs telling us about Jessica's overexpecting (is that a word?) parents instead of showing us with their actions and words what they're like. Or telling us all her best friends are guys because she's just that kind of girl instead of having it come up in a conversation casually, or just leaving it out.

Also you don't have to introduce every conflict and character in the first chapter, just give us a hook and flesh out Jessica's life and the people associated with it over a few chapters. Make sure to thread it in with real action though or it will feel like you're just stretching the story out to introduce us to people. So in this chapter you've introduced us to the overbearing parents, the best friend, Jessica's hate of law school and love of dance, and the catty ex-girlfriend who hates her, try picking maybe two of these to introduce in this chapter and perhaps allude to the others before expanding on them in later chapters.

To end this all, please don't take offense, I just thought you'd like to know the reason that I personally stopped reading this and my personal opinions on the subject.

Alyssa is Michael's little sister, isn't she? I mean he had mentioned something about wanting to get away from a friend and sibling as a reason for him being at Quake.

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OMG SkoW finally accepted my nomination! This is the second time i've tried )

and tada...

you're nominated for Best Chemistry at SkoW D

i love it is that simple perfect story amazing and i love it

Hm.. Most Memorable and Best Chemistry seems most fitting to this at SkoW, i wonder if it went through..the nominations i mean. HOpe u win! )

OMG im so sad its over '(

It was heart-thumping, all the dance moves and description really got me very excited to read more. Your words and descriptions were perfect. Though the first chapter had too much complaining and stuff, and i almost thought it wasnt too good, im glad my curiousity didnt let me leave this story alone. I continued on and thats where it really got interesting! Their attraction is really moving and sweet. Plus i had always equated dance with music and emotions so this story is really perfect for me..i feel like reading it again too.

Your story's really well written. I like the way you describe their dancing. Thanks for sharing. Hope you write more stuff!

*sniffle* that was an awesome story. Dance related fics are hard to come by and this one so far has definately been the best. I really really loved it.

this is my third time reading this wonderful story. i can never get enough of it! you probably don't read these reviews anymore but i thought i should finally leave a review after so much time. heh heh. This story is so captivating and beautiful. I'll be reading it again and again.

hey this is Svetlana from a long time ago... i used to talk to u while you were still writing out this story... anyway, im rereading this great story. how are you? you living in Chicago, right? i dont remember, lol, its been a while, but since Im reading the story again I thought Id say hi.. :)

wow i really have to congratualte u on ur witing skillz i mean wow there seriously good

u shuld seriouslt nthnk about taking up writing novels and stuff or maybe submit this story in for like a movie script