Oh my gosh that was really not what i was expecting that stuff scared me really bad but it was a story i enjoyed reading even if it kind of creeped me out. The ending as ok but you should make an epilogue where she forgives jack because thats the only way she can truly move on. Good story. :)

I love the story. It was a twist, but I like how it'd turned out. I knew all along that something was going to happen to Luke and Sage because their passion is so noticeable, but I thought it would be a love war on who should Sage should be with but knowing that Max was murdered...wow!

I know many people think it's gross because Luke and Sage WERE (The keyword is WERE) Step-siblings. Realize that Sage mother and Luke's father broke up. I mean, they aren't blood anyway...now if they were...I'm sorry but THAT'S GROSS if they were blood-related and it's sucks if your mother dates or marries the guy that you love father. Why the torture?

I am very shocked that Macie was killer and not Jack. Sending Sage for seven years? At first I thought it was a prank, but reading that she actually spent seven years...SEVEN YEARS! I would have kung fu everybody, except for the mother, that last wonderful judge, and Trish.

I am rambling, but I love this story. You did a great job.

i also called this twist. normally, i'd point out stylistic or grammatical errors, but it's obvious that you wrote this a long time ago and have grown as a writer.

i kind of saw this revelation coming... you spliced together two cliches. smart. (not sarcasm)

i have to say, this is the most unique twist on this ckiche i've come across...

*gapes at screen*

WOW.

This is fantastic! I absolutely love it! I can't wait to read more!

*adds to favorites list*

I absolutely loved your story!You are an amazing writer...but I can't believe you killed Marcie! And MAX!He was totally my favorite character!This was just so unexpectable, this whole thing...I mean even real life isn't that cruel!The deaths, the prison...Anyways, I think Sage was better off with Max.

But that's just me. X)

this story is so mucked up its not even funny - and your spelling is awful. the word used to describe the day's conditions whether its cloudy or full of sun is WEATHER.

Finally some action! :)

eh it was ok. life and court wouldnt work like that, but its alright of a story.

Pretty good actually, I was worried it would turn out into another teen drama cliche but it didn't, I'm happy Luke and Sage got together, I had a feeling they loved each other beyond petty history and circumstance all along. YAY for happy realistic endings!

I liked it. It was very unexpected and filled with suspence. I hope you will continue to keep up your good work in otherstories.

Sage is a weak woman. Luke is a sneaky bastard. A match made in heaven, I'm sure. Your story disgusts me. There's forgiveness and then there's stupidity.

great story, cya later.

I absolutely loved this story. So far its my favourite out of the ones I've read. In this story I felt such real emotion. When it came about that Max had been murdered I could have cried. It was so unexpected. I thought it was Marcie and that you'd end up putting Max and Sage together at the end of the story. I mean, I liked the idea of her with Luke but there was always that problem of him being her step brother!

I can understand why some reviewers might have been mad - I would have if I had been reading "Unlikely Passion" chapter by chapter. However, reading it as a whole, I believe you made the right decision. It was a great story!

~Silver