Reviews for Dead
DarkPharaoh1666 chapter 1 . 3/26/2004
Good. Sounded like a short story. Vocab is nice. Good job.
CW-nerd-12 chapter 1 . 3/5/2004
Nice start. I'd combine the lines, make them longer. The short lines make it too choppy for all your strong images. Also, you have commander on two lines next to each other, and it doesn't work. I like it, anyway!
Kiss-and-Die chapter 1 . 3/5/2004
It's good, real good, but there could have been more emotion expressed in the poem.
Good job