Reviews for Dead |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Good. Sounded like a short story. Vocab is nice. Good job. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Nice start. I'd combine the lines, make them longer. The short lines make it too choppy for all your strong images. Also, you have commander on two lines next to each other, and it doesn't work. I like it, anyway! |
![]() ![]() ![]() It's good, real good, but there could have been more emotion expressed in the poem. Good job Dee* |