Reviews for Stand Back, Daughter
Infinity Plus One chapter 5 . 8/1/2004
Perhaps not a twist, but good haikus.
Infinity Plus One chapter 4 . 8/1/2004
I am thinking that the last chapter will be a twist? So far, so good. I am visualising a darkened room with a scared child.
Infinity Plus One chapter 3 . 8/1/2004
I can see more sinister things in this haiku.
Infinity Plus One chapter 2 . 8/1/2004
Hm why do I see something slightly sinister in this?
Infinity Plus One chapter 1 . 8/1/2004
Haiku story? So that is the reason for the few words. This is a bright beginning, calming in a way.
Plato's Optic Runaway chapter 4 . 6/2/2004
This one is most definitely my favourite of the bunch; its elegance overthrows the rest in expertise, save perhaps the first. The antediluvian feel to this with hints at classicism are wonderful; it reminds me of a mother and daughter as you describe as intensely as the first poem in this collection.
Plato's Optic Runaway chapter 2 . 6/2/2004
It reminds me of my sister as a child; those plastic, superficial dolls with the flourescent pink cradle. Terribly reminiscent.
DueTuesday chapter 5 . 5/24/2004
i severly love your haikus. doors and keychains is rockin'. Youve seriously inspired me to start writting my haikus. check them out i think i have two up there so far but im going to be adding more soon.
Lina Inverse chapter 1 . 4/21/2004
I love the imagery... But just as a tiny little nitpick... it's spelled "artifact"
breakdown in the waiting room chapter 2 . 3/17/2004
I used to have those diaries, too. One time, I had this little one my mother gave me- one of my cousins read it and then ripped it up.
She's a bitch.
It took me a few times re-reading this before I fully understood the message, but the more I read a piece, the more my appreciation for it grows.
-Jessica
breakdown in the waiting room chapter 1 . 3/17/2004
Hm. . .I don't quite get this one, though I love the whole idea of an autobiography in haiku. Like photographs. And the title - "Stand Back, Daughter" is fantastic.
-Jessica
breakdown in the waiting room chapter 3 . 3/17/2004
Oh! *shivers* Love the image and the title.
-Jessica
breakdown in the waiting room chapter 4 . 3/17/2004
The tone of the piece is so sad. . .when I was a kid I had those same books. And no bedtime stories.
-Jessica
breakdown in the waiting room chapter 5 . 3/17/2004
Sounds like my house.
The words all flow together perfectly for this frightening, heart-breaking image.
-Jessica
Lina Inverse chapter 3 . 3/15/2004
I really like this one... It's so... deep... How do you carefully create something, then treat it like a slave? It's like if a parent gave birth to a child, and carefully raised her into a young woman, then restricted her into just doing chores/working for the family business.
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