good so far but i am still reading and i know i have a lot more to read talk to you latter Cdog

Good chapter. But I would have expected Ryuu to get upset once she realized where she was.

Better on the paragraph structuring, makes for easier reading.

Short but good. They all seem to be having alot of fun on the quest. Why wouldn't Ryuu sense that they are leading her home?

How good are the skeletons in a fight if a handshake breaks the hand bones?

Sentence structure and spelling is getting better.

Good chapter. The ghosts and skeletons were weird. And raw meat, yuk!

Hi!Guess who this is! We used to swim together, I moved 3,0 miles away, my nickname is Draver... Hehehe, anyway! Hoy! Did you get my letters? *sobs bitterly: you never replied!* LOL. Anyhow, as you can see, I signed on. I am also on fanfiction. So is me sister. So, nice fic. Tally-ho!~Dahl's Owl

Very good and very is quite a chariter and Ryuu is very interesting. Very good story line.

P.s. you need to learn how to spell the word 'Choose'

Okay, there's something concrete about their relationship now. And you can see Dahc giving Ryuu a certain amount of respect and care. I'm glad you guys are bringing this element into the story (just don't get X rated please :)) And also, wouldn't Ryuu feel betrayed about being deceitfully led to her home world? I thought they were going to Ca, um, well, the city of water and healing? Just slightly confused but the answer might turn up later (making me look rather lame :)) Anyway, great chapter and Happy Birthday Ryuu!

HAPPY BIRTHDAY! Good chap. Sorry for the slow reveiw, I'll be faster next time. I was just kidding abought the $100, so don't worry abought a pic. See you soon:).

It was good. My favorite part was how smoth ryuu a scale 1 to 10 I would give it a 9.5 out of 10.

NOTE FROM TREBOR: In case you did not know Larc is the guy that I brought to art class (not burt).

Hi Ryuu! Great to see another chapter so soon! HAPPY BIRTHDAY! ::GLOMP:: I hope you didn't mind me changing the chapter. I figure that's my job as co author... And I actually did a little editing! Great chapter! A few paragraph thingies that I didn't fix cause I don't know how they're supposed to be anywho, but rather well writern! 0.0 I romance sciene? When did you sneek that in there? lol, j.k. I think they're cute togather. (What wierd kids they'd have... ;) ) Anyway, it's getting late... Keep up the great work! I love you Ryuu!

A day at the races! I agree, it was short, but it also explains part of the riddle, you know someone she trusts. I might be wrong (and probably am, lol). Enjoyed it. So Marduck isn't mad at Ryuu anymore? I also have thought that it is interesting writing the story in present tense. Make sure to tell us when the next installment is, uh, installed.

the prologue introduces the characters really well, but I didn't quite catch when they came to the decicsion that ryuu would become dach's tutor?

Great chapter. I can see your gramer is getting better and better. I think I can finaly grasp the reason that they Ryuu's family would want her home even thou that were going to give her up to the evil so remind me to ask you if i am correct. And thank you for reviewing my story and getting me off the couch to start writing more.:)

Do I get one hundred dollors for being the one hundreth review? $

. Good chapter, thou short. We should post another before too long... :) Thanks for getting that one up, and great job editing! Great job luv! Keep it up Ryuu!

~Dahc