|Reviews for My Daddy Left Last Week|
| Story-Teller's Aide chapter 1 . 3/13/2004
that's really good and sad too. i like the going forward in time, seeing how things are developing. maybe, if you wanted to add to it, you could mention something in last/ 2nd last verse about how you learnt to live without him, you grew and got over it? maybe not...either could be good
| Areida Hollyoak chapter 1 . 3/10/2004
this ones better than mine! beautifully done, especially the last stanza
My dad left half a century ago,
And a day ago he showed up,
I said to him it's to far to late,
Our family's already fallen apart.
its so true and it just gives the whole thing more meaning.
i still think yours is better than mine... wazaa.