|Reviews for the thin and lovely smile|
| Manuel Fajar chapter 1 . 11/28/2004
Downy dreams you evoke well. m
| featherlight chapter 1 . 4/23/2004
First of all, I liked the title. It was a nice, creative way to open it all up.
All the words gave the idea of soft, hushed movements in the very early morning. It was wonderfully peaceful, and made me smile.
I love how you ended it: "My lips sing silence." A beautiful, delicate, slightly contradictory phrase. Perfect.
| teh tarik chapter 1 . 4/11/2004
This piece describes so much, and creates so much imagery, and still it can't be converted into words to give a proper review. Great work.
| chairmanmeow chapter 1 . 4/9/2004
| Ivriniel chapter 1 . 4/5/2004
Wonder ful haiku! :) A like that with the Naiads!
| Kelpylion chapter 1 . 3/26/2004
Softly beautiful. I love this image/feeling muchly.
| Infinite Smiles chapter 1 . 3/23/2004
Beautiful wording. I especially like the last line.
PS: I read your review of Seeker of the Way. and I say capture the castle too...It was hilarious. Good movie choice.
| Seeing Starz chapter 1 . 3/23/2004
I was caught up in the poem when I read the first line. Beautifully written tanka.
| A Girl in Denial you know me chapter 1 . 3/22/2004
In response to Fifteen Candles: Think abstract plot. If you don't get it, IM me and I'll explain. I don't expect everyone to understand, you know.
| Kellza chapter 1 . 3/22/2004
Lyrical, delicious. This poem isn't deep at all, just gently hedonistic and pleasant. I like it.
| glitterjewele chapter 1 . 3/20/2004
*sneaks into back corner of LYV's profile* heh, i'm back. *frantically dodges tomatoes* sorry! whoa dang, you posted this like a million years ago. *sigh* sometimes, i marvel at my own ignorance and stupidity. *double sigh* well, anyway, it's a fantastic poem. it has this definite yet gentle substance to it ~ like if you could create clear mist, this is what it would feel like, mmhm, yep. the final couplet was especially magical, i absolutely loved the "naiads laugh in echoes" line ~ simply beautiful. :) there's almost something kinda holy about it, actually . . . definitely a great piece. awesome work chica! :D
| frugale chapter 1 . 3/17/2004
A ... double haiku, if I can call it so, about sound. It's like you go camping, but after two days sharing obligated intimacy with your pals you escape briefly one night with you camera, and you watch a part of the sunset all alone, not even hmming a song, on the lake and with the great trees surrounding you, until it's become too dark and you can't take your photograh...
| not sure yet chapter 1 . 3/16/2004
beautiful, very much lost in a moment and full of imagery for a short poem, love it, very quiet, awesome job
| CoolBeans18s chapter 1 . 3/16/2004
This was so beautiful! It shows such a lovely, wonderous image... I'm speachless!
| Children of the Root chapter 1 . 3/12/2004
oh, very beautiful. I like the image it conjures.