Reviews for Tears
angel chapter 1 . 8/4/2004
it was good. you related well to other people i think. a little gruesome, but good. i really like the end of it.
Inksong chapter 1 . 3/24/2004
1) you need to work on formatting you can add more to a poem by using seperater lines for sentences or phrases or putting words that you want to stress by themselves on a in
2) nice imagery, a little gory, It's kinda difficult to see how you got from drowning on tears to rotten organs though.
Keep up the good work.
dawningfear chapter 1 . 3/16/2004
Putrid flesh is my favourite metaphor. I like it. I think you could take it further. Elaborate on the pain/decay affiliation. Throw in some maggots and the like.
Summerdazed chapter 1 . 3/16/2004
wow your choice of words are very impressive!
summerdazed