Reviews for Love and Secrets
Dezzire chapter 43 . 5/30/2006
Marry me.

Wow. Simply incredible. Each one of your characters is beautifully fleshed out. And the plot twists? It's 2:15am and I have yet to start studying for my physics test, which will take place in a few hours.

However, sometimes you tell instead of showing, or restate things. For example: "My jaw nearly dropped to the floor when I saw the gorgeous mass of powerful machinery that was Greg’s car." We know it's Greg's car, so you don't need to tack that on.

Other than that, keep writing! This is a touching, lifelike story that reduced me to tears and laughter, sometimes at the same time.
Hokit chapter 43 . 4/15/2006
Wow! My eyes are red and puffy from reading this at 3 in the morning, but it was well worth the effort.

I really admire writers who have the discipline to set aside time to not only share their work with others, but to actually go back and edit it as well.

Thank you very much for writing this story. I'll be looking forward to your next installment!
FFITM chapter 43 . 1/5/2006
Love the story, very tasteful with a well rounded sense of emotional description.


Firstly, your sense of pace was a little weird though, I understand that you cannot write out every day, but some of your transitions from, say, the school year to the summer, were much too vast to go without a paragraph-sized transition.

Try summing up some fake events or some slight reminiscence, it will add wonders to the style. If you need examples, I've found that J.K Rowling, whose writing does not usually impress me, does good transitions.

Secondly, your word choice is excellent in some ways, but at times I couldn't help but notice that you repeated some things far too often. The end of chapter 7 (the last line) used the word night three times. Not a huge mistake, but it takes a little bit away.

Please don't take these crits as a flame, I love the story, and you are certainly a talented writer. I'm just trying to give an actually usefull review.

MorbidTruth chapter 43 . 11/26/2005
This story was simply amazing. I truly think that you have a career just waiting to happen. You are a brilliant writer.

This story does what ever story should do, but never quite succeeds. It makes you laugh out loud and tears stream down your face with the understanding of what these two characters are going through.

I highly recommend you try finding a publisher, because this is a work of art.

MorbidTruth chapter 33 . 11/25/2005
I love this story. I've been reading it for the past few days. I never reviewed before because I wanted to read it all and then review, but I saw the song, Wonderwall, you put in this chapter and I almost fell out of my chair.

My boyfriend and I have adopted that song as "our song" and while I was reading this story, I was listening to it and thinking it would be a good song to be in this story.

Anyway, this is rididiciously long. Great story and I'll be sure to leave another review when I've finished it!Kelsey
Jurion chapter 43 . 11/13/2005
I... don't know what to say. The greatest high is the high you receive after reading a story. This story has left me so high, I fear I'll never come down

igloothree chapter 43 . 10/14/2005
I loved this story. Seriously. It was great how even though overall the story was rather sweet you managed to add twists in, like Conner leaving, that made it so much more interesting.
writers-tenshi chapter 43 . 8/28/2005
Awesome. Just awesome. You really just like...made me a happy person tonight. I love your writing style and the way you ended it was just perfect. Great job on it and...well, I dunno know if you plan to make more stories or something but if you do, go for it. You're a talented write, and I would love to read more by you _~
UnfortunateFortunate chapter 43 . 8/26/2005
I love it! It's awesome! D You're an amazing writer, this is compleatly breath-taking! I'm putting you AND this story in my favorites! ) Great Story, I love it ot pieces!
Poppy Pyres chapter 43 . 8/7/2005
This story is beautiful and touching. You have a real gift. Beautiful and perfect are the best words I can done.
nakoma chapter 43 . 8/4/2005
OMG! I just finished reading the story, I found it yesterday (on my birthday! WhOOt! The BD Ever!) and I've been glued to the screen ever since (except for a few hours of sleep I realized I needed when my family was waking up, and was a bit startled to see me up so early...or late...) This is such a great story and the last chapter got me soo worked up that I actually got misty-eyed over the phrase " repair the muffler." I'm a dork and it's the middle of the night! I have a right to cry!

I loved every aspect of the story, somehow it seem only right that they spent the two years apart to come to terms with themselves. I'm soo happy I found this and I hope you write more, if not about Greg and Conner, then about some other hot gay couple. (who said that? *looks around confused* I didn't say that! *sighes* okey I confess - I'm a fangirl -if I wanted romance (read hetero-smut) I could pick up one of my mom's harlequin- but I want the gay version! you got me! happy now? *sits back pouting*)

Anyways I have really nothing constructive to say (except that you had two spelling misstakes one in chapter 17 and the other before that, sorry I'm a joy-killer (I have no idea if you use that word in english but I'm swedish (by language, not nation) so who gives a shit)) I'm babbling I know, but it's your stories fault I didn't get any sleep last night, you should really put up a warning sign...

To conclude this review, which probably did noting except annoy and dumdfound you, this is the best story I've ever laid my internet eyes on (that came out kinda kreepy, ahem..) Keep up the good work!
ItalianQT chapter 43 . 8/4/2005
Awesome story! I can't believe it's all over! You did an excellent job! : )
Inherent chapter 43 . 8/3/2005
*blinks* This story was AMAZING! I loved the ending.
False Pretences chapter 43 . 8/3/2005
Mmkay, wow. This has to be one of the best stories I've read here one fictionpress. I'm addicted to slash and have issues finding good stories on here. So Thank You for writing an awesome story, I have fallen in love with your charaters, and by associationyou. XD

x-Krys-x chapter 43 . 7/31/2005

Thank you so much for sharing this story, it brought a lot of new stuff up for me. I loved being able to cry with the boys and feel their pain, you did an amazing job at capturing that. this was just... ah! i loved it so much. my favortie story so far!
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