Hmm. This is quite good so far. Your writing style actually sound like how some (more intelligent) teenagers talk. The humor isn't forced at all, and the dialouge is catchy. Nice story, over all.
I'm suspicious about that ring... I wonder if it's really Viviane's or something different? _ Guess I'll have to keep wondering for now.

It's rather interesting and unique. I wouldn't say it's an epic like the ones I love to read so much but it's in a field of its own. Good luck and keep going.