Hey, I really like this D
Funny how certain lessons get you writing fiction (fan or original) or poetry. It's biology for me... and history, and physics... and english. lol...

Im not just reviewin these cause im your mate. This is really good! I Like it. History lesson r a good time 2 write songs. Especially with out teachers! Well yeah this is really good. Well done!

the others are right the text "your" is wrong! but this is about poerty not grammer (note: i can't spell) i love how this is writen. it's great!

Well done. The short, broken lines are very effective, they portray the fall on the level of language/ outline as well. Also the frame "I'm falling" - "I've fallen" is good. I'm lokking forward to more from you.

Very good, (apart from the "your"/"you're" thing), I especially like the shortness of the lines, it makes the poem quite dramatic.

i liked it but i think you need to write a little more but it is good so far.

Nicely done! One thing you should remember: The way you are using the word 'your' is incorrect. You should be saying 'you're', because your is a possessive term, I believe, and you're means you are. Other than that, it's really good! Keep writing.