Reviews for White Against Green
REDh04x chapter 1 . 7/6/2009
I like how the wording is really in the sentence structure and repetition are confusing, but I think it adds interest to this piece. I know it's not intended to be funny, but the line "You look old and mean" made me laugh. It adds an element of naivety to the poem, which fits with your theme. This was fun to read.
My Psychosis chapter 1 . 5/22/2004
Woa, that's kinda messed up. But I love how it flows. You paint such a good picture in my mind.
S. R. Devaste chapter 1 . 3/30/2004
The rhyming was forced, I am not seeing the meaning in this poem...
Alex chapter 1 . 3/30/2004
Nice. Kinda creepy in a way when you look at each of the lines and realize what its about. Once again there is a certain innocence in the way you wrote, which I'm sure you intended, but I've noticed it in a few things you've written. Just saying. Good job.
Mar chapter 1 . 3/30/2004
I really like it, its rhymey. Im gonna go see if u wrote any other poems now. bye bye lol (u)
FantasticRealism chapter 1 . 3/30/2004
*tis Hitomi!*
O e_e I can feel the symbolism. :D This is very good! Yay for poetry!