|Reviews for The Return|
| Roadside Dryer chapter 4 . 4/23/2004
Okay, good. I get it! Now i know why! I think. Anyway great job, update soon!
| Roadside Dryer chapter 3 . 4/23/2004
Okay, lots to say. I liked the discribtion of hope he changed but something seems wrong. It seems like he killed the demon to easily, and why does the deamion want to kill these people?
| Roadside Dryer chapter 2 . 4/23/2004
Good, interesting. Poor Horton! Normally I would like making the ending a few more chapters in just so the story was longer. Anyway great job! Charge to the chapter!
| Roadside Dryer chapter 1 . 4/23/2004
Interesing. I have only one complaint, when you write he, you write h instead of the proper word, it just gets a little confusing. Good job! After I do a few other things I'll come back and read the rest. Thanks for the review! Updates soon. (its the remake of an oringal story that didn't have a point) Good job, very good! Have I found someone at last who actually know what vampires are? What they do? Things about them? Like everybody just makes things up and guesses, it drives me crazy!Fav stories
| Indravyn chapter 2 . 4/23/2004
Ah! Poor Holten. I'm not going to saying anything about sentence structure cause I already talk to you about that ;; This was a good chapter though.
| Indravyn chapter 1 . 4/23/2004
This was very interesting. It has me intrigued so far and curious. now to settle that curiousity with the next chapters!
| one winged fallen angel chapter 3 . 4/19/2004
very intriguing chapter. it sets up the story well and builds the suspense. i can't wait for the next chapter. i like how you separate the different scenes of the chapter, but i do have one complaint. your paragraphs are quite long. my suggestion, especially for ease of read, is to break them up into smaller paragraphs in the future.
| Falkner chapter 3 . 4/12/2004
That chapter definitely had a lot of action. It'll be interesting to see what the back story is to all of this.
| Jinx86 chapter 2 . 4/7/2004
Honestly I really don't get the point of the story, why was Horton murdered for one. is someone out to get John or something to make him pay. Man I am seriously confused?
| Falkner chapter 2 . 4/5/2004
That was a good chapter. The only recommendation I have is for you to separate the paragraphs when different people speak. Other than that there really wasn't anything that I noticed. I'm really interested in where the story is going now and why those people were injured/killed. Hmm...
| one winged fallen angel chapter 2 . 4/4/2004
Okay, now i am definitely interested. In the past my reviews have usually not been good, but for once i have no complaints. i just want it to be updated. By the way, i love Robert Hunter being a football coach.
| one winged fallen angel chapter 1 . 4/4/2004
pretty good start. i like it. very little grammatical or spelling mistakes. this looks as if it could prove interesting
| Falkner chapter 1 . 4/1/2004
This chapter was very good; your use of description is thourough and accurate, and other than a few typos where there was "H" instead of "he" I didn't see anything really wrong with it.
I like how you started off introducing the character the way you did; it makes the story seem more personal. I can't wait to see what's going to happen now. Keep up the good work!