|Reviews for The loss of equilibrium|
| Qu33n of Spades chapter 1 . 7/12/2004
okay, let me put it this way... the way you phrase things (not only in this one but in the song before it) is just... awesome. Love it. ;) already, off to read the rest. Woo hoo!
| I Am Faithless chapter 1 . 4/13/2004
Dotty, very much.
| IpsoFacto chapter 1 . 4/7/2004
So, well, that's the way it is. Equilibrium? I never had it.
| Eulogy of the Scorned chapter 1 . 4/6/2004
Brilliantly flowing. It allows for so much.
| xzerinieah chapter 1 . 4/4/2004
I'm confused. Are the last two lines still part of the poem?
Anyway, great job.
| Unfairy chapter 1 . 4/1/2004
interesting use of periods... is the apologetic thing at the bottom part of the poem? cuz if its not, then dont submit it in the document
| Celtic Moon chapter 1 . 4/1/2004
actaully i think the periods give a lil sense of anticiaption and what's really going on. sort of like a baboom sound in a movie, the part when you know sumthings not right. nice touch i would say