Reviews for ZeroNine
Xerro chapter 2 . 4/4/2004
Fair enough, but maybe you should have said that at the start
Xerro chapter 1 . 4/3/2004
Unfortuantely i only have critiscms to make on this, but so you know i'm interested on reading the next part, and any critiscms i make are just to help you.
1. The chapter is so very short.
2. It's hard to tell who's speaking because you don't start a new paragraph whenever someone speaks.
are no paragraphs whatsoever, whenever you begin a new topic, which isn't directly related to the previous line you should start a new paragraph.
4. Not much is explained either as to what the plot of your story is, but that may take time to develop so i'm willing to be lenient on that.
That's all my critiscm, like i said i'll read your next chapter and possibly following chapters if i like your story.