Reviews for Erase Myself
MIY23 chapter 1 . 9/23/2004
All along, while reading this, I was saying to myself "Yes, yes, this is so true!". There were times where I actually FELT what you wrote here. So I was astounded to see how my feelings are written in this poem. You managed to express exactly what it feels like.
The ending was pretty sad. I felt the person had no hope. That no one will ever help him/her.
Keep up the wonderful work. Continue on singing, dancing, writing, playing, and smiling!
graffiti-skies chapter 1 . 9/18/2004
liked the way you brought out emotions in this poem. esp liked the 4th stanza.
the mouse that roared chapter 1 . 5/11/2004
Wow. Very dark. The emotions, trying to give, but being rejected... The end was especially good.
Damaged chapter 1 . 4/13/2004
Sad, sad, poem. There was a lot of depth and emotion in this - excellent job. It made me feel exactly what should be expected of a piece with this title. Great job.
MagenDavid chapter 1 . 4/4/2004
"Why do I have to cry
Only to the mirror"
"If maybe I should just erase myself
Against the deep blue of the sky
So I won’t block the sun for you"
"And maybe I should just erase myself
Against the blackness of your road
So I won’t mislead you home"
"For me to erase myself
Against the scarlet blood of dusk
So you can watch your sun go down
Without my glimmer of hope
Getting in the way of the dark."
-my fav. lines!
Darling, this problem is getting WAY out of hand.
About the poem-THIS IS AMAZING! Ein ma lehagid! Ein meeleem, pashoot ein!