|Reviews for One Day|
| Manuel Fajar chapter 1 . 10/12/2006
Inside a dream floating with listless ease,
I felt a flight of fantasy o'er sea,
A soaring venture for a love to see,
¿Why else could such illusion heart so please?
Then I awoke and shook off slumber's fog,
For that sleep had me quiet as a log,
Upon which rested princess dressed as frog,
A cold sensation,—made me want to jog;
Or stir,—and see if perhaps a sweet kiss,
Could amphibian turn to a fair miss,
Though I would hope not too much of priss,
But, dreams are gentle and life all amiss;
There are no lips that can transform cold skin,
While for a sailor better mermaid kin,
So all of this I ponder hands on chin,
For Love's a griffin odd that heart does win;
When it comes traipsing with its strange magic,
It might be comic, but never tragic,
So red heart begs clear soul to light a smile,—
Happy to dissipate all burden's pile.
p.s. ;-* or better :-)
| autumnskyhill chapter 4 . 11/29/2004
Hey! I remember you reviewed my poem 'Remember When', and you mentioned that you wrote a poem like that. Well here I am, reviewing it! This is really good, and I look the part about dreaming about each other during naptime. Bravo!
| Cry Tears of Darkness chapter 4 . 5/5/2004
ah i like the 3 versions! i think that the extended poem is the best one though.
| IcyDevil27 chapter 4 . 4/14/2004
I love every version of this poem/song. I love the extended version the most! It's so reminiscent!
| Romantic Squirrel chapter 4 . 4/6/2004
these are all very good. I like the extended poem the best of all three of them. you have great spelling to, unlike me who spells at least a thing wrong in every poem, lol. Keep up the great work sweetie