were you feeling particularly devout when you wrote this or just trying to show college diversity or something?it's a good story...are you gonna keep working on it?

Aww, it brought tears to my eyes, it was so sweet! I loved it. And it's all for me!
Ok fine, half mine. ;)

i love this story! the emotions you convey are really awesome!

Just read this chapter. Hm this seems like a very quiet story. It's only focused on human relationships and feelings. Ahh the typical christian guy attracted to the bad girl and the his friend, Elise attracted to him. Do I see a love triangle forming? Good chapter. _

Hi, Sorcha Jade ;-D
You've reviewed one of my works before and for that, I thank you.
In your review, you've asked me to kinda go through with you on how to subtly work in God in your story. I'll be more than happy to do that for you, Sister - just email me at
As to this chapter, it's fleshing out the characters more which is good because it's consistent work. I do encourage you to continue...
And I'll be looking forward to your email. As soon as I read your email, I have a set of questions to ask you. Based on your answer (which will give me ideas on what themes resonate well with you, or what themes you're passionate about), I'll be able to give my humble opinion.
Fair enough? Okey dokey my friend...good job with this chapter, and I'm looking forward to your email and the next chapter ;-D

Ah, the dangers of getting lost in the shuffle - does one go for God, or does one go for the pleasures of the flesh...one of the fundamental battles that the youth of today fight everyday.
It reminds me of what's going on in my youth group at church. If more people could just hear all the pains and frustrations that they have, then more people would understand that this generation has the most challenges that it's facing today - yet they are forced to face these issues at such an early age.
Awesome chapter. I felt so bad for Renee...I hope you update very soon ;-D

Hi, Sorcha ;-D
I love the first chapter ;-D It's accurately close to what happens in a church youth group...which I think is a unique and very testing situation for anyone who's a member.
Will keep reading next chappie ;-D

thnx for the acknowledgement..i loved this chapter as well..interactions are a good way of discovering facts about the character..showing not creative writing gem.. update soon chica

this is so good. i'm almost ashamed that you're reading my story.. i love how you portray people. Like Cale is not perfect and I really like how you share his struggles. I also like how you're not afraid to have Renee swear. Although it hurts to read it.. it makes the story so much more real. Everything about this story is so good! Thanks for reviewing mine and telling me about it! Please update soon!

Cale needs therapy and NOW. Poor poor Elise! Good story- keep it up!

You've built up an intriuging plot so far- all these different characters from all different backrounds. Interesting. I like it- keep it up!

im disappointed in renee but a change this soon would be realistic, kenny really annoys me. As for constructive critism i would say leave out the tag lines you have in dialouge something my creative writing professor warns against. update soon, glad that i inspired you

that is incredible! you are really good with details.. not so many that it gets boring, but enough to get you point across. This is very well written and the plot is... eye widening.. this is starting out to be a very promising story.

i like this, it wasnt too long, i really hope u continue this story and not abandon it like u did with ur others.. and ur writing style is soo familiar...thats a good thing.. update soon