|Reviews for The Siren's Song|
| AquaRibbon chapter 1 . 5/17/2011
Okay, so here we've got...a flesh eating vampire siren/morgan? What IS a morgan anyway? This was interesting for sure, I liked the feel this story had.
There were a few mistakes I noticed, but they've already been pointed out by other reviewers. Overall, nice job! :)
| kayt chapter 1 . 8/4/2006
great! i want to hear much more about this story!i love it
| Marzipans11 chapter 1 . 2/3/2005
Oh... I didn't know someone else wrote stories from the point of view of the legend. This is a good take on sirens (although I don't know what morgans are) and it sounds like it could be expanded into a better story. Also, I disagree with the one guy who reviewed saying you had too many paragraphs- each of your paragraphs marks a different place in time and therefore are necessary. I don't think there's such thing as too many- after all, in standard English style every quote is supposed to go in its own paragraph!I do have one nitpick though... "they realize they are trapped as the throws of the sea drags them nearer." Actually, that would be spelled "throes." The fact that you KNOW that word is redemption since its so archaic. Speaking of archaic, *high five* for spelling it "faerie." The true spelling. Keep writing. :)
| Phi 1.618 chapter 1 . 12/22/2003
Interesting perspective. I understand if it's from a characters perspective, but there are a few things which could be corrected, such as:
"I do love ships, even if it’s only because it carries my dinner"
the main character talks about ships(plural), and then goes on to say 'it's only because it carries...' as singular. A more coherent way to write it would be:
"I do love ships, even if they only carry my meals."
With a piece this short, there is no need to paragraph as much. New lines, yes, but there is no need to leave as many spaces. Overall these are only suggestions and I hope they have helped :)
| The-Dark-Authoress chapter 1 . 10/13/2001
Brilliant i luv it can't wait till i read the next chapter keep on writing this is a good story
| me chapter 1 . 9/1/2001
| Silver chapter 1 . 1/4/2001
Shutup cant write!
| Red Wings chapter 1 . 1/2/2001
I remember this. I have reason to believe that this was...nah. It seems a lot like it...but maybe...
| HighWind71587 chapter 1 . 1/1/2001
short, but good so far. I liked the similes. Good job.
| Shara Ka'Li chapter 1 . 12/30/2000
| WhiteWolf chapter 1 . 12/30/2000
Very cool and interesting!
| Liz Parker chapter 1 . 12/30/2000
Your story is a little bit unusual!
And very very weird!
I have to admit that you dont know how to make storys!
| KawaiiKitty chapter 1 . 12/30/2000
Wow, that sounds good for the first part, please keep writing! .