I love the repetition. I also really like the part about not being able to fly with two broken wings. It provides excellent imagery and really ands an extra element of sadness. Well done!

This is great. I like the lilies part in the end. Great job!

holy sh!t! omg, this is great! normally i dont go for angst (which is really strange cuz thats all i can write ?_?) this is an AMAZING poem! i demand advicelol, jk
review me when you get a chance, thankies!

great poem, i lyk the imagery

Hmm this seems more like a pg-13 rating because some of my poems that are R are so much harsher than this lol but yeah, I like the imagery especially in the first stanza, the crimson sky. The rhyming doesn't seem so forced so I think it works well. Thanks for your review and you said you seen me somewhere on fictionpress? heh i think we all kinda see familiar names on here, cause I've reviewed like 500 people so you're bound to see me somewhere P hehe.
Jenna xx

This is a really excellent poem Your really good at the rhyming something i cant quite grasp but poems arent all rhy,ing keep it up

Once I knew how you felt. I was ready to let myself die. But for the love of myself I just couldn't.
I can't let myself just fall.
This is such an honest poem. SeekeroftheWay asked me to read this. And I really hope you can find the strength to fly again. I have no idea who you are or what is happening to you, but it is never too late to change your life, really.

Wow, the end of the last stanza is so strange to me... I am the product of two lily-infatuated people, and I grew up to love lilies. I almost don't know what to say to this... almost like you want to die in peace? The lilies would be my last idea of a place to die. But that's just me.
Great metaphor use here. I get so jealous of this talent, I have to remind myself I'm not in high school yet! XP But seriously though, I really like this.
agid

yAy! another poem from J0513! GREAT expression of your soul in agony here, I hope others can relate instread of berate. These are HER feelings, respect them! I cry with you.
Aw! I let you die, but only to be ressurected, reborn, renewed in spirit! Not dead body, but dead to all you thought you knew! Let the past die, its claws tear into your flesh, cut off its nails!
Look again at your "friends" are they really foes? You are the only one who REALLY knows! I am an eagle! I smack the noisy selfish bearer of death raven aside and swoop down with amazing speed with no heed to my own safety. I let you land on my back. I let you rest, find shelter in my up-Down from the Neg attacks! Put your house in order before you sell it, my friend. At least put things in order. Make me your relator instead! I want to be in your soul not just your bed, so color the past red, and rest up in my blues. Rest up, you have a LONG HARD sojourn A HEAD!
~Luv & Blessings of Positivity, John

That fits my constant emotion. Your good.

This is a truly emotional poem