Very good. Your descriptions of such simple things were perfect.

Lovely.

- JC

OOH! absolutely fabulous! the subject is so simple and it would be boring, but you change into something meaningful! *two thumbs up*

Interesting way of putting it. We've all been there-the yelling, taunting, sneezing, whining. The bus can be so annoying, and yet... you got these thoughts from it. Ponder this: could the bus be a blessing because its atmosphere makes you acutely aware of the things around you?

Wow. Just... wow.

This is one of the best descriptive pieces I've read in a long time. It was so exquisitly crafted that I felt myself flinching from my own uncomfortable memories of bus riding. I was a window-watcher too and so could easily picture myself doing the same things.

Very well done.

You hit the nail right on the head! For the last seven years I've spent about 2 and 1/2 hrs a day Mon-fri on buses and trams to get to and from school, and yes, they can be hell, but they can also be inspiring. I'm kind of planning a few short stories about the people I've seen . . .but I don't know, you've pretty much summed it up.
See, I can write nice reviews (although i'm still horribly verbose-I'll go read "The Phoenix" and see if I can write a short review!) Keep writing, and thanks for reviewing "The Prison"! :):):)

I love the way you painted this story. I've so often felt the same...when I ride the bus, I do everything it takes to get the window.
I kind of want to read more.

Epiphanies on bus rides are cool. Only... there's no epiphany here. What?