aww poor Will doesn't know shes not interested..but im rooting for Aaron...even though Will sounds cute...its all about Aaron

man i know how it feels to have interest in an older guy...sigh...oh well great story so far...can't wait to see what happens

dude, there was absolutely NO characterization at all. This entire chapter was just actions, no emotions or thoughts or any of the good things that make the story interesting. what was molly thinking when Aaron said she was like a niece to him. was she disappointed, because she's in love with him, or was she happy? what's going on in the people's heads?

~emberlyn~

i think you should have a sequel that starts right where you left off so that if people get tired of the story they can at least finsh it but they dont have to keep reading what they think is the story if they hate it. tell me what you think love karla

YAY! Man o man... I love this story! It has everyting you could want! They fight, they make up, I wish real life was like this! Congrats on such a great story and I can NOT wait till the next chapter. Please hurry! Great story writing and heh heh i think we've all had inspirations like that eh? ;)

I think this story is good like it is it dosen't sound like a soap opera to me. My vote goes toward keeping it like it is don't change it cause this is an awsome story!

i really liked how this chapter wasn't purely happy, but also included the struggles they are facing and continue to face. i also like the end because they are resolving the issues. very nice.

Great chapter i'm totally hooked, update soon!

What is Molly's relationship to Andy? She just got into the picture and I have no clue how she fits in. She isn't Andy's daughter, is she his sister? So how hold are all of them? It sounds like Molly is about relatively close to Aaron's age/generation if she's Andy's sister. Confused here...

Wow! While readng your story i felt so many emotions! Many i could relate to. I am actually having current problems with an older man..but it's not like these two lovers. It's so wonderful!I love the way you made the characters and all that. It's actually also helped me see things in a different light! You write very well and I honestly love this story! Please continue it when you have the chance! It's amazing! Good luck to you!

-Brandi

Wow. I have been reading this story for a while, and you were right, the other part of it did start sounding like a soap opera, but these new chapters are amazing! The emotion and real drama protrayed what might really happen in a situation like this. Molly's turmoil is exactly what I would feel if I were in her place. Great JOb! Please add to this story, I want to know what happens next.

P.S. I think, after you go back and edit the first part and you have finished the whole story, you should try and get it published. This is WAY better than most of those Harlequin Romances I have read.

Woo hoo! Yay! An update! Good chapter, good writing, and I think they're acting more like normal people now, even arguing! :) :P This is a good thing...Btw, that's too freaky your older crush was 27...So was mine! 8 O LOL.

Hey cute story but yeah it's a bit over the top. I like it though and i'm waiting for more

Hm. Molly certainly has a problem, I can see where this is going...

Not a completely productive chapter, but overall good nonetheless. Even though I understand this is your first draft and plan to rewrite it, I will comment that when I read this chapter, I felt a sense of Molly was being a little too dramatic. I can understand how hard this is for her, but in some parts, it sounds...corny and amateurish, you know? The cliches of "ending the pain" and certain details make the story like that.

Well, I still enjoyed. Good luck and update soon.

Very interesting... So where are they going to go? I guess that means you'll have to update soon.

Me... *cough* College is really hectic and Music theory is really kicking my butt.. That is a bad excuse isn't it. But I'll update soon... promise.